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DG, I have to say that yours stories lately have been outstanding reading. This is a great one. To the readers out there. Don't read this story if you don't want to get teary eyed. I'm a guy and it happened to me. A very emotional story

An Avid fan

Two people, Two 'pasts', but they both tried their best and made themselves into better people. Glad they found each other.

I really like your style, You're able to put maximum emotion and power into minimum words. Add in great plots and believeable characters and I couldn't ask for more.

Thanks!

DG, You write tremendous stories, but this may be your best.

It is far beyond my poor power to evaluate. I can only appreciate, and hope that you continue. Thanks

Thanks for a wonderful Christmas story!

Boyd

love conquers all. thanks for writing

You write really heartwarming stories. Love them!

Where you have second chance at life, should be love too. That was a beautiful tribute, written in your own unique and wonderful style.

For some reason this story really resonated with me! Reading it I felt both sad and happy at the same time.

I agree that this is your best story. It really brings the emotions out.

This is the season for happy endings!

I think there's a federal law somewhere that your not supposed to bring tears to the eyes of Horny 'ol Sailors. A great story to author just before Christmas. Thank You. Ronnie W.

I rate a story by how well I become immersed in it. This one totally absorbed me from start to finish. Nothing that didn't belong, just a tight story that allowed the characters to develop and grew at the right pace.

Well done - John

I think people can grow up and change, although some would disagree here. And I hope that in most situations, the protagonist would not have to go into a coma in order to "learn the truth." If his wife to be really was "a catch", she would have come clean before the accident, because one's past can never be totally swept under the rug. So I'm not impressed about that cowardly part of her, frankly. I also do not think the tense you chose to tell the story in was the most effective. It reads more like someone announcing a story, especially when she is making "the big confession." Since the forgiveness message is so important for the season, it might be worthwhile to revise this at some point. I see it as a "diamond in the rough", especially as regards presentation. Good luck in the contest!

Wowsers - A Story Teller with grace and brevity plus the touch and respect of honest characters painted with feeling and emotion.

Don't change a thing about your style and warmth and quaintness as they make you the Story Teller we appreciate!

The only danger as I see it is the possibility we will give you a big head with all this applause which may promote change. Please don't! With Very High Regard & Thanks

What a great story.

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As a young man I spent a fortnight in a coma. I also had the out of body experience almost exactly as you described it. This above all else made it real for me and transported me back in time 50 years. I heard and saw visitors come and go and was able to describe what had taken place once I came out of the coma.

I truely enjoy your stories but this one was just in a class of it's own. I seldom offer comments on other writers work. There are enough people doing it without me adding to it. It this case I made an exception. It was just so damn good.

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I just finishd reading "A Second Chance". It was absolutely outstanding with a small touch of Deja Vu. You see, I'm a retired U.S. Navy SEAL. I was severly wounded once a long time ago. My girlfriend then, who is now my wife, stasyed with me for the entire 8 months that i was comatose. I was told that she never left my side. I just wanted to say thanks for for sharing with me and I hope that you continue to keep writing because, God has given you a truly wonderful gift.

Beautifully sentimental. I really enjoyed the optimism in this story - everyone needs a second change. Thanks for sharing this.

A second chance is what we all need, and to actually receive it is a miracle from heaven. This little story is one of the better ones, for sure, and the car crash twist makes it oh-so-human. Twins! Oh, now that's truly miraculous!

I always enjoy your stories but this one may well have been your best. It was not only a moving tale, but really well written - - with a nice pace to it. Some of the revelations of the story could have been predicted, but you never let the reader run off too far in advance. I really enjoyed the story and thanks for sharing it with us.

Honesty.

Even if the female lead in the story has/had a checkered past, and even if he has one too, if they are both honest up front with each other, and both know what they are getting into and still make the decision to do it any way, then I wish them the best and that makes for better story. Though I do have to say I'm kinda bothered by his sister Leah's reaction in the story. It leads me to believe that her husband probably doesn't know the truth, but thats a side issue for another day.

This was one of your better stories, if not the best so far. Very very nice story! And let me also say, Fantastic.

Not necessarily erotic per se, but very tear jerking and neat. It was sad in a way, but also very happy in the end. More of these fantasy stories need to read this way.....Very good writing!

This is the best story I have read on the site. True or Fiction it was a real tear jerker. God and love are two powerful forces in life. Keep up your great writing.

I enjoyed your story. Thank you for sharing.

This is a great story. You do write such good stories. Please keep up the good work and have a great holiday season.

just wonderful. Thank you for reminding us of the "good" in life. respectfully naynay

DG, this time you really did it! This time you made me cry! A good cry, I might add. Wonderful story, and well written, tooooo.

I have read a lot of your work, both here at Lit and on another site. Some of it was/is... well, lets just say it is different, and leave it at that. But this story is just special, and I thank you for it.

Keep up your fine work.

Len

I cried, shamelessly!

Lukas

I loved the story.

Would he have reacted the same if she had just come out and told him ahead of time? Or would the old double standard woes come into play? Who knows.

Gotta love the idea of twins.

A great work DG! Thankyou!

Charleybear

Utter puerile, maudlin claptrap written in a juvenile style. Upon reading the praise heaped upon this story, I'm convinced that the average mental age of the readership of this site is twelve.

Simply beautiful and moving! Thanks for a wonderful reading. You brought warmth into my heart. And who cares about crying? I was simply moved. Thanks again and good luck.

A fan always.

benhur726

to the person who wrote "ugh". if you hate the site so much, why peruse it then complain? are you twelve? Just as an aside: I couldn't help but notice your annonimity. Are you a coward, as well?

As for DG: you did an excellent job. kudos.

Well told tale, DG. Great ending. Who among us does not have a few things we wish we could erase from our past?

Yes, a truly beautiful, tender love story. DG Hear teaches us that steamy sex is not necessary to spin a hot yarn! I still have tears in my eyes!

This is probably the strongest of your works at this site. From the moment of his reawakening you had me crying.

There are not many writers good enough to elecite strong emotions. It is relatively easy to disgust someone, or to turn them off, but to bring a reader to the point of shedding thie own tears of happiness takes a large amount of talent and skill

This is the 3rd time I've read this story and every time my eyes water up. Now that's some powerfull emotions being yanked out of you. Please keep writing. You have an awesome ability to move people. With the highest regards, Luis

i have red a lot of storys in here but by all means you are by far the best i have ever read thank you so much for your storys

So moving for Jerry and her to have twins on Christmas with the names Mary and Joseph that pulling them from heaven

DG your the best i loved this story .

Pat

Evoked emotion! What do we malingers do all the time hanging around Literotica? Maybe hoping for something which will evoke emotion. Sex? So highly charged a subject that it is sure to evoke - something. Hoping and then along comes a wholesome story like this... reading this, I remembered what it was that I was looking for! Found it in "A Second Chance." Nice to dash my cynicism once in a while! irchristo@aol.com

It's hard to believe that you can take such a simple plot and turn it into such an emotional whirl wind of a story. I wish I had half of your talent. To the person that bashed "UGH" you should try to be more forgiving. When I read a comment like UGH's I wonder what in their life has happened to cause them such pain. No, I'm not real religious but I try not to judge people because we never know what a person has been through to bring them to this point. That's probably why I like DG's stories. The ones I've read start out with a character with apparently little or no moral fiber but as the story progresses you learn the circumstances surrounding the questionable behavior and you begin to understand why the person did what they did. Again, Thank you DG I really enjoyed it.

DG Hear and JakeRivers, you guys really are the best. Another great story. Thank you,

Brent

Auckland NZ

dear author, it was one of the most sentimental reads i evr had on this site. nearly cried seeing the love between the characters and your way of presenting it. looking for more such reads from you.

This is truely the very very best that I have read in a long long time..... My most heartfelt congratulations to you for writing this epic that should be told and retold to everyone as an example of what love, trust, and God can do if we only will let him into our lives.

Truly not what I expected to find on Literotica. Inspiring. Everybody deserves a second chance. Perhaps this should be submitted in another venue--deserves a wider readership than here. Actually, this story came at an opportune time in my life--a time requiring forgiveness and a second chance for someone important in my life. Thank you.

Great story. I thought it was one of the best Romance stories on Literotica. If this really happened to you, you are one of the luckiest guys alive.

This Is one of my best story i've ever read,thankyou for writing such a nice story

But let's save the bible thumping for Readers Digest, OKAY!

This was a great read. Thanks

Really a wonderful love story. Had a hard time reading the last bit, got real foggy on my laptop.

Well written but a good proofreader would be helpful.

BTW, what does DG Hear mean? At least what is the "Hear" alluding to?

Thanks,

de Jay

This story was very touching. I loved it. Thank you for writing it.

for all naysayers and non-believing infidels, no-one can ever know for certain. Is it a crap-shoot, kismet or just not the time for something to occur, Who can say. TK U MLJ LV NV

We all need a second chance - just remember that when it comes - don't mess it up!!

there is someone there above all............The Almighty........

What a great story, brought tears of joy!

I liked the play of emotions

Nice work - it wound well - a bit predictable of course - we all knew she had a significant past - but you did a great job with it.

You made the central point well and finished BIG very creative

This one was just ridiculous.

So why did my eyes mist up? And why did I finish with a warm feeling of satisfaction?

Beats me.

this story really brought tears to my eyes

Too often, young men are lauded for their sexual conquests and called 'studs', whilst young women are condemned as 'sluts'. It's good that he recognised the hypocrisy implicit in that double standard, and acted upon it.

but you did lay it on a bit thick. I may have to get tested for diabetes after reading this.

You touched on so many themes in this story. First, losing the first marriage because of getting a little on the side. Then, the scared kids in college going all out to have sex with everybody because they see 'popularity' as an antidote for their insecurity. Then, finding his true love, the only woman in the universe for him. Then the destructive nature of secrets, and the total power that the person who knows the truth holds over another. Then the stupidity that a person displays by deciding that the laws of physics don't apply to him just because he has a reason to drive fast. Then there's the power of pure love, coupled with the power of prayer. Then comes the importance of forgiveness, and the purifying power of giving a person (two in this case, Sally and Leah) a second chance. And finally the redeeming quality of giving birth to innocent babies.

That's a lot to cram into what, 7000 words? Yet you did it, and you made every one of your points quite well. So if people want to treat this like a walk in the park, I think they haven't been paying attention to what they were reading. Don't listen to 'em! Keep up the good work!

I do believe in God and pray (not enough). I caught a tear with this story and I guess that I am not quite as cynical as I used to be. Thank you, DG.

Did anyone chuckle that the babies were named Mary and Joseph?

This one is a real emotion filled story.

The story would have been just as meaningful without the "divine intervention."

Nice love story thanks.

Thank you, DG. This one has got to be one of the most beautiful, most well written stories I've ever read, and even now, I'm sitting here in shock and awe, with tears raining down this old man's face. God Bless you, DG; and I hope to read more just like it. peace and God's blessing to you, my friend.

God's Speed to you,

MoogPlayer

I've pretty much seen how man can be in all his/her forms. I saw a father that got drunk on Christmas eve and stabbed his son over a crab cake, I've seen people go blow themselves up for their dream of 72 black eyed virgins. I've seen a teenager run into a burning building and could only save one of two children and I saw his aftermath. I've seen women and men cheat on their significant others even to the point of abusing them, men and women. I saw a frail 80 year old man rip open a door off a crashed car to save two babies while the car was on fire only to pass away from the burns after he made sure the children were safe. I saw a single mother who went nuts and put her own baby into a hot oven "because G-D told her to like abrahamtried to sacrafice Isaac. And I myself was in a car accident where I went face first into the windsheild of a 75 Buick sedan that was doing over 45mph. I was told that I died and that only the heroic efforts of the driver who hit me doing cpr saved me, or did he? I remember being above the scene and seeing all the drama played out. I felt myself pulled away only to see my grandmother in a field that I had never been to but later found. It happened to be a field where she grew up and she held me tight and explained how it wasn't my time yet. She then led me back and showed me myself on the roadway with the paramedics coming to work on me with the driver still doing CPR on me. I saw and heard my parent's crying next to my body while the driver prayed for me. I asked my Grandmother why I couldn't stay with her as I missed her terribly. Once again she told me it wasn't my time yet. Then she promissed to keep an eye on me and that she would always be close. I felt pulled back into my body as the medics continued to work on me but still felt I was a lost cause. When I woke up I was crying ( I was all of 13 at the time). I could still make out my Grandmother next to my parents when she turned to me and kissed my forehead, I could no longer hear her though. She faded away and I cried again. When I told everyone what I experienced they all put it down to just my brain making things up, that is until I described the field. My father went white as a ghost and explained that it was near to where my Grandmother (RIP) was raised and where my father lived near for most of his childhood. He never mentioned the place nor did he ever show me the pictures of it. I told him something that only my Grandmother and he knew about. I also spent three weeks in the hospital and then three months recovering. I got my second chance so I can empathise with the main character. According to the medics I was legally dead, they did not think I would make it to the hospital and they felt it was also a miracle. As to what G-D has planned for me I still do not know, but I do believe that I will see my Grandmother and now my mother again. I pray that I am making them proud and that I am fulfilling whatever it is that caused it to not be my time yet. I have often asked why was I sent back instead of some others that I've known personally and who I thought were better than me and deserved to live. Why was I so different? When I stand up in front of our G-D I will try to ask.

People say a leopard can't change it's spots but I think differently. They just have to want to do it enough and they can. At the time of my accident I was a young kid of 13 and started getting into trouble. After that I always ask myself would this make my Grandmother think less of me and if so I would stop and do something else. Cheaters can change, however I am one of the BTB crowd. Just because they can does not mean that the offended party should not seek retribution against the offender. Nor does it mean that they should be forgiven and allowed to return to the one that they offended. It just means that if they get a second chance (say with a new spouse) they should endevor to not repeat themselves. Yes they can and should change just with someone else.

In this story the girlfriend had changed, his sister though maybe not so much. It was never explained why she was so scared her husband would find out was she still up to her whole hijinx or had she changed? Did she do those things while she was with him, was she still doing them? If so then she hasn't changed. She may be embarrassed about her past but, that doesn't mean it is the end of the world. At worst she can tell her husband that she was like thst then but has changed for the better and she was ashamed and afraid he would reject her.

now if she cheated on him then he has cause to leave or seek out whatever means of redress he desires and can pull off.

Okay I'm getting off my soap box now.. Gave it a five* rating...

seeker

I agree women can sleep around just as men do. But once you commit to each other that life is over. As far as God is concerned , miracles happen but I do not believe that God had anything to do with it. People used to believe the sun was good or some stupid statute. Now we made God becauce we needed to ground people from all kinds of beliefs. That my theory. Millions have died over there godly beliefs. Nice story from DG Hear. He usually ends them like this.

no one really knows what happens at time like that. for you none belivers you have never been in a fox hole or had a ship shot out from under you. i haven't either but have freinds that have, so yes there is a higher power watching over them. my late wife was dead on the table twice but came back . for you butt holes to chicken and or sorry to put up your name fall in a hole & pull the dirt over you !!!!!!!!!!!

God botherers!

You left the same comment on one of my stories that you did on this one, and while I don't know who you are, I'm still going to pray for your soul...God bless you!

MoogPlayer

ones each reader will have to answer for themselves.

rather than weigh in on the philosophical issues I will just say that it was a well crafted story, told well, with lots of room for personal reflection.

As you can probably tell from my user name, I'm unlikely to attend a Mass any time soon, but unlike some other atheists, I have no problem reading stories with a religious bent to them... If the story is well written, which in this case is true.

After all, I thoroughly enjoy almost all of JimBob44's works and he definitely leans very heavily towards Catholicism (and in some cases anti atheism). I have even allowed a certain amount of religion into my own work (see The River) as even though I'm an atheist, my characters don't necessarily have to be.

From a personal standpoint, I did find the God stuff ladled on a bit thickly, but then it was the nature of the story, so I am willing to offer some latitude here. And to be honest, it didn't really detract from what was a highly enjoyable tale.

Yes, there is God! There is a lot to be said about it, but , unfortunately, this is not the forum for it.

all too often you hear of miracles happening that have no explanation....but deary me what a real slut she was and his sister....who has kept it a secret from her man....god help her if he finds out.....just one thing that made this a piss take was naming the twins...Joseph and Mary.....that is taking it too far....

I also believe in a higher power. I call that higher power, God. I believe He gives us all a second chance.

Hi there peoples! Truly I snickered at the Babies names! I for one believe in God! If you don't believe you may never experience the love of God! The story is sweet and sentimental! I love romance stories and there is that! Thanks for sharing this with us. Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

As far as believing in God is concerned, I would rather believe in God and die to find out that he isn't real, as opposed to NOT believing in God and then dying and finding out that he IS real.

... But wish it was way better written.

For example, Deb is a completely mystery to me - how insane a cunt must you be to even entertainment the idea that cheating on my husband with your brother-in-law is a great way to get back at him for *raping your sister*... 'Gotta be one insane chick to come up with that logic, amirite?

Plus, there's a lot of unneeded repetitions throughout the story, and - certainly, an editor would have may the whole thing more readable. And then, sometimes, the whole thing felt so hollow... not good for such a dramatic tale.

But I do not hate the story - not at all. Except for the three obvious exemptions, all the characters here were really likable. I just think their collective journey deserved a more concile narrative structure.

Tears and Tissues and I wouldn't have it any other way! The Love of God is to Love yourself and your Loved ones! We all should accept the offer of Love because without Love there is no Hope! I hope my comment doesn't anger anybody for I am a

Believer of God He saved Me!

Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us! ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF

Loved it so much I wanted to give it a 20 and I can't even give it a 5 - 4 times.

Honesty is best. People can work with it and build from it.

What story was @MightyHorny talking about?

Believe he is talking about “Another Chance”

The wonder of birth, the wonder of the human heart to be able to flush garbage away and see only beauty. I enjoy Literotica, but despise those stories which are nothing more than porn in words. Thanks DBH, please many more. Some will bad mouth this comment, not to my shame but to their own.... n08rkm1

DG writes with elegant simplicity. One of the other comments mentioned interwoven themes - mercy and grace being two of them. I know two people who have had NDE's; that part of the story has happened IRL. Five stars ain't enough!

Great read,

If everyone opened up there closet from there youth and exposed there behavior we might have an overflow at the church parking lots.

Some of these stories but not all of them I share with my wife. I do believe this will be one I will be sharing with her.

My wife use to love to read but from the young age of 28 she became legally blind and can no longer see the print to read. With that said I read to her to keep her mind and her imagination on edge for lack of a better definition.

Thanks for the great story. Held me from start to finish.

Bringing religion into a Loving Wives story is tricky. DG Hear was able to dovetail that in a low key, realistic and meaningful way by using the desperation and torment of a man with nowhere else to turn. Well done!

Nothing to say except that I loved it , really loved it. Thank you.

Once a cheater, always a cheater.

Once a slut, always a slut.

I strongly dislike those clichés.

Just because it's a catchy saying that is often repeated,

does not make it true.

Paul in Oklahoma

A beautiful and loving story. NOTHING else needs to be said.

mcwhorter28445@gmail.com. aKa. Ron

very beautiful

Why had you to write this story for us to read? Now I'm sitting in front of my computer with tears in my eyes.

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I’m a 72 year old man and I cried too.

Great Story 5*

Such a moving and wonderful love story with again another Happily Ever After ending. Another 5 star+ story. Well done DG

Though I've read much of your works and have enjoyed them, I somehow missed this one. Regardless of your beliefs, one would have to see this as a very moving story. Thank you for your effort! 5 stars.

somewhere east of Omaha

So far I really enjoy your stories, I just can't stop reading your stories. You must not be an old timer, because from the stories I've read you seem to give sexual equality to the men and women in your stories, which in my estimation is refreshing. I should be working to wrap my story up, but your stories are better, I'm a first-timer.

Wonderful story! Speaking of GOD, as a preemie (1lb, 14oz) in 1957, the doctors said I could not live. Thru prayers, I'm still here...

Well done.

Well done!

Bill

One of the best Stores I have read in the last year