by Pars001
Ok... I think... but staring now I'm going to need a scorecard.
A previous comment was made concerning the use of 'man' and 'woman' instead of using names. I think this is done to reinforce the randomness of the chosen breeders, and to that extent, it works for me.
Nicely done.
pars, i first found you on xnxx, and followed you here because searching through all of your stories for the next one was incredibly difficult some times, but i do enjoy your stories, some seem to be a little to focused on sex, but as i read the plot needed it, and some stories contain almost none, i have no doubts you are an accomplished writer somewhere, but the only thing i ask is fire your editor, and proof reader, there are a lot of misspelled words, and wrong words in sentences in places that i have to stop and read the line a few times before i can understand what word you wanted to use... but, the plot, the body, and the endings are always well timed and the stories are captivating, thank you for many many hours of great entertainment.
dare2b1@gmail.com, drop a line if you consider this a worthy criticism... as i have said i very much enjoy your stories, but a good editor and proof reader would help a lot, the email is a dump email, so i only check it like once a month, but i will respond.