by sagacious21
nice going, it's good to find a woman who know what she wants and goes for it.
Also thanks for making it more believable, no super studs and diva's just ordinary people, I'm looking forward to reading part 2
It was very different but a good read all the same looking forward to the second part
After I started reading I was hesitant to go on, you pulled me in and I am glad I stuck with it!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
I liked your delivery and topic - a little different from the norm of ex-military super guys. The story was warm and down to earth - please deliver future parts.
I see no reason to make Diane so physically unattractive. You could have left it at "being blind".
The stopping point was hideously abrupt, especially for a posting which gave no hint that there would be a "to be continued" element.
Other than those two points, it is truly a sweet story.
This is a great beginning for a romantic story arc, please continue.
One minor point though... As said by an other commenter, it wasn't necessary to make Diane "ugly" - although that is in the eye of the beholder. Giving her blindness would have been disability enough. But overall I do like the plot.
It would be a nice touch for mom to offer herself as thanks for his sacrifices of giving her a grandchild.
You could let mom come home and her girl tell her the details making mom so hot that she want. Some.
I didn't mind much that the girl was ugly. It was something different than the usual barbie meets rambo.