All Comments on 'Chaperone Makes Three'

Read my comments in the New Story Reviews in the Author's Hangout of Lit Forums.

You ended your story well, with lots of wonderful description and details. I'm glad I kept reading.

The first third of your story changed point-of-view several times and had spelling/punctuation errors, though and put me off a bit. As I said, your ending made up for it.

Don't write directly to the submission box, but use a word-processing program to help correct some of the more blatant grammatical and spelling errors. The POV thing will come to you with practice.

Good job

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