by MistressJoanna
Such a hot awesome story. I cannot wait until the next chapter. Also, how about a more detailed description of Gabby and daddy? hmmmmmmmmmmmm. I came 3 times while reading.
I like the softness of it...every now and then the writing gets so clunky, in a way that's distracting and disconcerting. Words like "pussy" and "cum" feel...teenager-ish, trite, too easy, too boyish, vapid, annoying really. I should write my own things, I have such high standards.
Thank you for not having a virgin story include a misplaced hymen! You get full stars for that fact alone!
I will never understand where the myth of an internal sack of blood or fluid derived from, but it is so ridiculous to see it perpetuated. If a person doesn't know enough about their anatomy or the anatomy of their characters it would be best to learn about the subject. The internet has many diagrams and charts showing the extra thick skin which is at the entrance and serving the purpose of keeping things from entering. You described the feeling caused by the ripping or tearing of such sensitive skin perfectly.
I can not wait to enjoy more of your stories!
Holy shit this story was fucking amazing I literally cried like I was turned on but at the same time I literally felt their conflict and pain and shit it was too real ππ