All Comments on 'Dave and a Mothers Needs'

This story is more about Dave and Kim. Even though he had sexual relationships with his mother, it doesn't seem like it's his mother's needs. The title to the story should not be "Dave and His Mother's Needs."

"And His Mother's Needs" should not be part of the title.

Ok story though.

Considering how close Dave and Lillian were, and her being a psychologist, she shouldn't have yelled at Dave to get out. She should've sat him down and explained it to him in a reasonable manner.

This wasn't fun, entertaining, or arousing.

If you don't get it attention in the first line, it's too late.

You may not have meant to but you made the two "men" in this story rapists and rather horrible humans. Very disappointing.

"Finally, he jammed his pole in her pussy hard, and thrust in and out hard and fast for a minute. Then he slowed and gently increased the intensity and frequency of his thrusts. Lillian moaned with pleasure. Her body writhed and contorted in response to the pleasure. Her body matched his rhythm. She purred with sexual pleasure as he thrust harder and more. Within a short time, Dave came inside her, as she orgasmed again"

I'm sorry that you feel this is a good way to describe a sex scene. After more than half the story as build-up, I can't help but feel VERY let down by this 6 sentence dribble of an anticlimax.

This was hard to follow and I didn't enjoy the dialogue. Had some potential but faltered quickly.

Okay I disagree with most down below but I will say this needed a bit more polish.....

This story was great but had many problems with it is if the mom didn't want to get pregnant why not get her tubes tied or have a hysterectomy done which would free her of the ability to get pregnant not only that if the brother and sister had a relationship first then I'd say according to the information given he had to be under age at the time as he was just entering college which would put him between the ages of 17 to 19 when the story begins and he was having sex with his sister while she was in college so next time think out the story a bit more and make the ages a bit more clear if your going to have them be basically right out of high school so at most she would have to have been a senior in college for this to work within this sites parameters putting him at 17 or 18 but only just 18 during the relationship with his sister and he enters college at the start of this story which means the relationship would have only lasted a year..... So with all that said proof read and make sure the story makes sense if not think things out a bit more before posting a story like this

Excellent storylinee. Definitely needs some polish. The last paragraphs were rushed. You need more detail when closing out the story. Did the father ever return home? Very drastic his mother barring any contact when he moved out.