All Comments on 'Dexter's Renaissance Ch. 05-06'

mixed with modern alchemy and magic wands. TK U MLJ LV NV

Great detailing of how to make the business world work. So far the story lacks of rival for our hero. I guess that got used up with Randall. This is interesting and fun for me but I imagine that others will complain about the lack of erotism!

It's becoming a pleasure to read this story as Dex's renaissance unfolds.

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My only (minor) criticism is that Ch. 05-06 was too short. But we can't have everything.

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Thanks for writing

what you have done so far. I eagerly await the rest of your story.

I can't want to see what Dex does next

5 stars.

Loving wives i don't think so boring yes very.

It seems like Sandra's in the rear view mirror. Now the narrator bounces to next challenge. The wheelings & dealings of the business world can be quicksand for a story but Coaster has the skill to keep things afloat.

Yet man does not thrive on winning interoffice political battles alone. Hopefully there is a appreciative & attractive woman in Dexter's future preferably in next installment.

Coaster2 I really enjoy this story. I like that it is taking time to develop Dex's story and life and the after affects of the hit he took.

I also like that this is not a "burn'em at the stake" type of story but one where prices are paid, and people move one.

Cannot wait for the next episode.

Looking forward on pins and needles impatiently waiting for the promised continuation

I really enjoyed your stories. You may never know how hard it is to get Cadd and Engineering to talk and work with each other. Great to see others know the problems.

Great read! I really enjoyed it even w/o a focused continuation the personal, emotional issues. I know nothing about the work of the firms but I was aware of CADD'S.

As a Professional Engineer I have had considerable interactions with designers/CADD designers. It is enjoyable to see someone write a story that deals with this very important part of the engineering/design process. I am enjoying the entire story and keep wondering if my private writings have been made public. Keep on writing.

Sorry but your writing style just doesn't do it for me. The red line is there but you just don't have the imaginative skill to flesh it out. My Opinion.

Yes you have read this story before. Coaster posted it on another site. And it was not any better just because it was there. Coaster is a top author on both sites.

It amazes me how you can criticize good work but can't even get your facts right.

Coaster I can't think of any of your stories that have not been very good; just my opinion.

Thanks for the good read.

Needs more actual story.

Around his head. Because he sure seems like a saint.

No complaint either, with including industrial management relations in the story.

Excellent plot development. Five stars.

Some of the best writing/editing/proofreading I have seen in LW stories. Have we seen the last of the twins? How old is the widow of the deceased Trent partner?

we started with Sandra, the email discovery, the subsequent drama and intrigue. We then took a three hours cruise to a tropical island with twin amazons. And are now on a new adventure in soggy Toronto doing corporate management 201. Will we ever see Dex reunite with his children? Visit the Dynamic Duo? or have a happy and fulfilled life? I hope so.

sorry Dad, is it true. TK U MLJ LV NV

I don't understand your criticism.

I don't see any "fluff" at all, it's pretty much "Just the facts, Ma'am!"

I'm pleasantly surprised that unless I missed it, there has been no criticism for the minimal sex in the story.

A lot of writers would feel the need to include at least ONE sexual encounter in each chapter, but Coaster2 is confident enough in his writing ability that he obviously doesn't feel he has to pander to the readers!

more like a renovation with smiles. TK U MLJ LV NV

The lack of affect on Dexter's part that was a pervasive feature early on in this series was something of a turnoff. It's hard to really get into the story if you can't feel the guy's pain. But the funny thing is that the author is keeping a breezy pace going with various points of interest that keep the story rolling effectively.

Still, one feels that the story needs some blowups, some fist-clenching, or something! Somehow, the egregious - no, downright sociopathic - thinking and scheming of the wife needs some counterbalance in the storyline. Sorry, the Dutch threesome wasn't enough to distract me.

And in that regard, the dialog between the characters seems great, except between the husband and wife - then it seems positively wooden. Something is wrong. The husband is just to cool and lacking in affect.

One feels that all of a sudden there is going to be a boomerang effect of some sort!

When he meets with the wife and she looks at his offer of terms, she's saying it's not fair. He acts like they are playing bridge or something. Weird!! Then when he finally calls to get her opinion she sounds like Siri reading off a cue card. Maybe she went full retard.

In all other respects this is real nice. It bristles!

One thing missing is Dex keeping in contact with the twins and thinking about them, as it is now, it comes across as if he has cut all contact with them, which makes no sense in the modern world we live in.

But he is stirring up the water. How soon will everything blow up?

If my math is close, it would only take one of the 3 local partners to shift the stock balance.

Will we meet the widow any time soon?

Nothing much going on here.

I agree with previous commenter. Nothing really going on here. Tension died after chapter 4. Still very well written.

I don't think it's worth continuing

Good, interesting story. Dex seems to be a good guy.

Unbelievably boring. This is just a very sketchy portrayal of a guy's first few weeks on a new job. As interesting and exciting as watching milk curdle.

It is exaggerated here for dramatic purposes but the business climate in Vancouver vs. Toronto is truly marked. Vancouver is more in line with LA while TO sees its self as New York and is much more buttoned down and formal.

I'm giving you 5 stars. I like your development of personal relationships regarding business and motivating people to work together. As a resident of Calgary and formerly in BC and Manitoba, I get the attitude difference in Toronto. A story that doesn't include character development is boring to me.

so he had the chance to bang twins the rest of his life and turned it down for a job that pays marginally better, but has twice the work load?

It seems a bit strange that he put his twin lovers behind himself so easily, considering how important they were in the last chapter, but not surprising considering the clinical and logical way the MC processes problems. As someone who has spent more than a little time in engineering and design offices, I found these chapters very interesting. There is a hidden hierarchy in the engineering world, where some, but not all, think of their iron rings to be the equivalent of the pope's ring. The unwashed masses should kneel and kiss their rings to honor them.