by Jay142
I thought the story was basically good and the writing was careful although a bit old-fashioned (e.g. the use of the term "coed). But there was a bit too much repetition in the writing and not enough passion in the sex scenes. It was easy to read, pleasant and I will definitely read more of your stuff.
Great story. The sex seemed a bit mechanical and Amber had feelings or emotions about it. Make those changes and write some more about her adventures beyond her revenge.
Sex was not and well detailed. The emotional and relationship aspects were not explored. Why be hung up on a relationship that didn't work out? If having more than one at a time or being exclusive is reason to quit.was not explored.
A woman getting more and more aware of her power to choose her sexual way in life is a wonderful thing to read about. It would even be better to be a participant - a willing dick as it were. It is great for her and the men along the way, as long as it is sex and lust, not love and commitment. Great job - wish I was there!