by TheTalkMan
Welcome back Talkman. I am so pleased that there is a new story from you. I am going to wait for you to post all five parts and then will have a marathon reading over the coming weekend. I hope there are some new twists in the plot of your new story.
Maggie so far makes a great addition to whatever you would call you'r rogues gallery, loving how much in her head in this one and in my opinion how different the story is in a-lot of aspects.
Looking forward to the next part. It's always a nice surprise when one of your favourite authors posts a new story.
...although I'd have preferred it if there was some incest involved. Obviously, I don't know exactly where you're going with this (although I have a pretty good idea) but six pages and no proper fucking seems odd. There should always be room for character and plot development - but we would like some actual sex thrown in. Hopefully chapter two will be a bit more 'action-packed'.
No fuckin' gets you a 4.
And why is this in the NonConsent/Reluctance category?
Awesome start though. Really looking forward to chp. 2.
Some people are issing the point when they say there's no payoff, the corruption is more insidious here.
Love the buildup, hope the next chapter is edited/posted soon.
Keep up the good work!
It's embarrassing how much I look forward to your stories TM, keep up the good work.
Maggie Hewitt is a disgusting, despicable character. I won't bother to finish reading this terrible story. 2*