All Comments on 'Half-Sister, Full Lover, New Arrival'

you need to add more to this story as soon as you can, very good story line, a few mistakes in spelling, but overall very

well written, could not stop reading, can't wait for the next

installment.

say DITTO! to the first responder's comment. Please continue their encounter.

Hayeden can now be his Out&About girlfriend. The girl he shows to the world and no one looks cross over.

Please no more long waits.

I am enjoying this story greatly. I cant wait for the next chapter

cant wait for the next chapter

That was awesome

And I thought I was slow to work on finishing touches. Four years to write a sequel? OK, Star Wars wasn't written overnight either but it stood the test of time and built an avid following. Hay, it took me many years to even find an introduction to your works. We need to work on your marketing skills!

Good read; and well written/edited.

what was hayedens big secret why did she runaway and why wasn't anyone looking for her??? you left a lot of plot holes that need filling try doing a rewrite and use a good editor next time.

Absolutely awesome!! Wonderful writing and very enjoyable! I can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Passed me off. Was a great story until you brought another into it. WHY?????

Had to read the first one and was impressed. This second outing didn't leave me wanting at all (with the exception of not knowing what caused Hayeden to run away). But again, another Master stroke of a story. Please tell me that you will finish this one out!!! It's too good not to! 5 stars!

I liked what was going on in the first story but feel that the addition of Hayden just muddied up the water, so to speak. A threesomes nice but the action between Hannah and Hayden had way more love and feeling than when it became three. Kind of feel like he was cheating oh Hannah.

It would be nice to have another chapter where they all work it out.

Yet another good story with no ending.

Just so very disappointing.

Rapier

(9/24/2021) The first story was an enjoyable read as was this one. 5 stars for both, but I need to agree with Rapier875. These narratives are series-worthy. I'll need to check this author's list to see when these two well-written and well-imajined stories were submitted and all the others on his list.

It’s always the fucking lesbians, you could’ve fucking left it out

VERY good, and well written: spelling, plot, and gramar too.