All Comments on 'Home Alone with My Sister'

This is an amazing story that you could easily continue, the only thing wrong with it In my opinion is that it was to short. Please continue, you could turn this into a great series

I found you switched tenses sometimes which made it strange, and the sex scene actually came off like it was written with no experience. Like "my balls were crushed between my pubes and her perineum and scrotum", seriously?

I really get a strong impression that English is probably a second or third language for you. Some of the phrasing is awkward or disjointed. Maybe you wrote this in your native language and ran it through a translation application. At any rate, I felt that the main character narrating this tale is a self centered entitled asshole. Because of that, I didn't enjoy this short story at all. 1 star.

Family sex story are best you can fullfill your need easy.

Lucky basterds

Overall I thought you did a great job with details and describing scenes such as your previous part when his sister was introduced and all the great details fell into place when describing her. Or even with the thunderstorm. But then during the intimate scenes you lacked a great deal of detail and descriptions that should really have been focused on.