All Comments on 'Hostile Takeover Ch. 02'

great twist - came out of left field

Enjoyed it though.

Perhaps a French registered ship, with a nod to DQS' WWWM.

Another fantastic (apropos) story. Unique, but I guess they should be. Your writing is a pleasure to read. While not as prolific as JPB, you're able to turn out superior stories week after week. That in itself is quite a feat. Great stories that are finished and posted in a timely fashion (every Thursday)!

Thank you for sharing.

When did this story make that hard u-turn from "loving wives" to "non-human" catergory? You lost me.

Great story. I liked the Sci-fi thing I'll Be Back.

Liked it but much prefer your loving wife stories. I'm just not into sci-horror.

I felt compelled and drawn to chapter two only - because right up and until the end of chapter one, I really enjoyed the story. Your little game of ' I'm back...damn'.

Well anyway - done, good story and Thanks!

And I like it. Thanks for an unusual but entertaining story.

Spooky cool. That would have been prime halloween stuff, but I'm glad you didn't hold it back till then.

Plunging straight into sci-fi/horror/suspense, eh? This was definitely different from the usual LW tales!

I actually hadn't seen it coming, Preston hooking up with Amanda (before chapter 2 anyway).

It was an entertaining tale.

the premise is absurd... it is predictable and you tell very pporly. In short this story is boring because once accept the premise ANYTHING is possible.

maybe water boils at32 degrees not 212 degree F. Maybe Palin is really a Mensa candidate. Maybe Matt Moreau loves strong men and hates wimps.

You are a good writer . This was not a good example ! A lot of tongue in cheek that was quite funny but overall pretty bad story.

So this caters to all my perversions...lol

You certainly have a way about you Stang. Full mark on this one. I was enthralled from the start. Pat yourself on the back and go shine the pony once more...giggles

Amanda

I think this was a very good first attempt at a fantasy/thriller. I enjoyed it... good plot, good action, good continuity... some humor and lots of drama. But if I may offer some advice:

USE LESS COMMA's!! Please use less comma's. You place comma's in the oddest places and it makes your sentences seem choppy. It makes your sentences hard to read.

Thank you for your efforts. I enjoy your product.

Too weird to even think about following. Maybe some of the sci fi guys may like it but i'm old school. Keep it real.

You have a story that actually has a legitimate need for a 'stang.

Good read....I grew up on Asimov, Heinlein, & Zelazney.....love good science fiction....thanks!

its fantasy vampire spook bullshit.

come on folks....

Hi Harry, I generally love reading your comments, and I pretty much know what to expect from you. I really don't mind your negatvity towards me, and like all criticism I try to use it to make myself a better writer.

The problem I have with this comment, was that you used it not to talk about what you hated about this story, but to take a cheap shot at someone else. I've actually read all of Matt Moreau's stories and liked them. I'm looking forward to reading one of yours, I'm sure it will be the best thing ever on the site, since you know so much about what a bad story looks like.

As far as this one goes. I gave you a disclaimer from the very first part of the story that this one was going to be very weird, and very long. Your comment on the first part was that it was awful. So why read the second part? No one had a gun to your head. There are a few people out there who want something different from the "my wife screwed my best friend, and I shot them" stories.

I'm probably always going to occasionally post something that's a little different just to stretch my legs. It's the only way I'll get any better. And some of them are probably going to be dismal failures. I hope I'll always have you around to tell me how shitty some of those failures are. But I'd really like it if you could keep your negative comments about my stories, to my stories and not use them as a way to put down other writers, who at least have the guts to put something out.

Have a nice day Harry. If you really want to win some of your credibility back, you could start by apologizing to Matt.

and have been reading it since 1947.... This is really fantasy though I would call it personality transfer and stay away from mentioning souls. I feel this is a very interesting story with some problems in the execution. I would say that there was too much description of what other people thought by the narrator or perhaps too much explicit explaining. Anyway it was less enjoyable than some of the others and I will give it only a four....

you said it would be crazy....something very different from what you usually do....it was both and I Liked it!! Great Job!

The pseudo scientific cloning explanation is trite. If I'm reading a science fiction story I know I will need to accept some things on faith. But even then I expect a good or reasonable explanation. Cloning cells wouldn't clone memories and personality. If you wanted to stretch things it barely might be possible that Anna started to take on Charlotte's appearance but not her personality. And it certainly couldn't be triggered by a kidney transplant. So we're back to the mystical. You would have been better off leaving it there rather than trying to make up a dumb cloning explanation. <br><br>

Next, the story is all over the map and inconsistent. Charlotte says she has been faithful in her new body but the old boyfriends that originally kidnapped him say she fucked them to get them to help. Oops. Where does Charlotte get the money or contacts to pay or even find mercenaries? Walmart in the Mercenaries Department? Mercenaries-R-Us? And mercenaries going off killing people and carrying out all illegal actions without getting paid first, especially by a woman they don't know and probably don't trust? Come on! The war that Charlotte assembles is completely unbelievable. After all she has done there are no police watching the company or other people's houses? She seems to travel and act with impunity. <br><br>

Then we get into illegitimate son of Sam. Of course they then have to make nice with him. He tried to take over the company and has a major personal problem with the family and they trust him to be a major executive in the company? Wow. Great Kool Aid they serve in the company cafeteria! <br><br>

There are also point in the dialog where one character is speaking and then it switches into context of someone talking about that character. It was an editing screwup but I had to read it several times trying to make sense of it and was annoyed that it was trash. <br><br>

There was also a tendency of a character to do soul searching and moralizing during confrontations. Duh, when people are hunting you and shooting at you you don't start examining your love life and relationships. "Pardon me mister bad guy while I figure out my relationships. I'll be with you in a minute." A very small and quick epiphany might be acceptable. But paragraphs of tripe? Gaaacccck. <br><br>

I struggled and finished it but I was glad it was over. Sorry, I had to work far to hard to get through it to find it enjoyable.

to read your next posting. As you said this story was a little on the weird side (Let's be honest, it was totally weird) but I enjoyed it very much.

Don't let Harry In Va or anyone else change your style or what you want to write about. You must follow your muse.

I also grew up on Heinlein, Asimov, Niven and others so it was easy for me to get into this fantasy Sci Fi thing.

You style is improving with each story. It's fun to watch a new author grow and spread his wings.

Thanks for your hard work and I'm waiting for next Thursday.

Woodmanone

It was an entertaining story! I didn't have much hope for it after the first chapter but you did ok with it. Thanks for contributing stories on Literotica. Look forward to your next one.

Just as I was writing a long detailed break down of this story Jasonnh beat me to it. So he covered all of my points.

Fundamentally this is not really a LW story. I think it is a mistake to put it under this category and I think it is a mistake to call this science fiction as well. I know most people that are fantasy fans are also science fiction fans but I am a NOT. I make it clear distinction between the two---- but again most folks don't do that. The only type of fantasy story literature that I enjoy are the ones which feature actual alternate worlds -- such the LORD OF THE RINGS/ the Hobbit etc stories.

You are fabulous writer and most your stuff is really top notch and first rate. When you have written really great stuff I have made it VERY clear that I hought it was great and posted as such. This one just the deeply rubbed me the wrong way.

with regard to apologizing to MM... fat chance Bub.

While it is true he has written some good stuff from time to time ...most of his stuff is CRAP.

It is not crap because I don't like his sexual deviancy and obsession with cuckold stories.

Most of his stuff is crap because the stories have bad plots that feature an interesting Premise or certain situations that come up..... which are simply not resolved in any rational manner. His characters are very inconsistent.

I will not argue that the guy has serious writing talent because he clearly does. But it's also clear that his sexual obsession is so overpowering for him that he is simply unable to see what his stories get panned a lot. MM loves sudden forced and irrational reconciliations and never resolves the premise or conflict that he goes out of his way to set up.

From Olney to Metopolis to Grant City in one day? Boy did you fly. Just another point that this story is a fantasy and not a LW story.

Illinois resident

We didn't get to see if she had a snapper. She became celibate after the transfer. The money missing from the first chapter is how she paid them jasonnh. I would bet all my money that you could find several merc sites on the net. Advertising. Half the money up front and half on completion. Many seem to think things like this are complicated, they are not. Just add money. Hell, I know a couple of crazy women like this, no transplant required. In the story the charger couldn't get it done. If it was a corvette he would have been caught, especially in the curves. That would have added to the story....the fire breathing beast with evil eyes that he just couldn't get away from. The one of his nightmares. I suspect that is why one was crushed in this story. :)

Stang,

What a (twisted) tangled web story you wove.

Alan, solved a lot of business time problems for Preston and Amanda. Good twist. One of your best yet!

Thanks for sharing "Thursdays" on Lit.

x

I'm just gonna keep this short..you are truely talented and just a bad ass writer. I loved this story and can't wait to read the next one you put out!

that Carter Brown wrote. Wonderful imagination and very hot! You are one talented dude!

I've read all of the comments, both from the first and the second parts of this story. Many commenters complain that this was posted in the wrong genre--Sci Fi seeming to be the choice du jour, though I'd probably also consider Erotic Horror. Still, though this could have comfortably fit into either of the latter genres, I still believe it properly belongs in Loving Wives.

Loving Wives stories nearly all have at least one of two themes. The first choice is that hubby catches wife cheating and the marriage is heading toward divorce. These tend to be dramatic--though HDK and Britease have both shown us that doesn't have to be the case--and end in either divorce or reconciliation. The second choice is that hubby loves watching his wife screw other men. These rarely end in divorce.

The theme here fits very neatly into the first category. Hubby caught Charlotte cheating and decided to dump her sorry ass. What's not Loving Wives about that? I will grant you that the way the plot played out was a roller coaster ride through the other genres with wife inhabiting the body of the new love and--in a unique twist--wife deciding to take the Terminator route with hired guns and so on. To me, though, the way Stang-O-Rama did this is what makes it so goddamned good.

That's right, I said it was a good story. Great? No, I think he could've taken a bit more time with it and really ratcheted up the suspense. But it was still damned good, and my hat is off to him for so consistently, week after week, giving us creative and original ways of telling a cheating wife story. Is this believable? No, but neither was Star Wars. Stories don't have to be completely plausible to be entertaining. The vast majority of great works written by Stephen King, Dean Koontz, Tom Clancy, Robert Ludlum, Kurt Vonnegut, and so on were not even remotely plausible. It was those writers' respective abilities to get us all to suspend reality and get into their stories, though, that made them great.

And that's where I'm stuck in a conundrum. Do I implore the Stangmeister to take a lot more time on each story and try to make it as well crafted as those of others so we can all then be drawn into these stories at even deeper levels, or do I just say fuck it and encourage him to continue posting his incredibly original yarns on a weekly basis. Since I look forward to Thursdays, I'd tend to the latter. Still, I'd really like to see where he can take one of these stories if he really put a lot of time into crafting one of them.

Either way, there's never been a writer in this genre who was so capable of coming up with such original and rollicking yarns on such a regular basis. Never.

She had Preston held hostage by her boy toys while she went after her mother. While he was being held the toys told him this:

"But Anna is also letting us hit that sweet pussy of hers, for helping her. She's not as good a fuck as your ex. But she's a lot tighter. It's almost as if nobody has used that pussy."

"Hey dumbass," said Ray."You talk too much. Nobody was supposed to know we're fucking her; especially, not him."

So Anna was NOT celibate even though later on it is stated that she is. "Neither of the men knew what she meant. Strangely enough, since she'd been in Anna's body, Charlotte had actually been faithful to Preston." These bits of writing are in direct conflict. <br><br>

As to the money disappearing in the past and being used to pay mercenaries, Charlotte was spending it on her boy toys, cars, electronics, apartment, partying, etc. She was liquidating her stock because the money was all used up by her lifestyle. She was spending a it as fast as she got it. Big cache left to hire mercs? Possible but unlikely. And if Anna has money, Amanda and Preston have even more. Anna is the only one that can hire a private security force?

I liked it a lot. This story definitely had the twilight zone effect. You're the man! How do you come up with this stuff?

and weird story. but your writing pulled it through. Kudos. you had the guts and the talent to make it work. you deserve the 5!

I think it was also stated that one of the guys said that to get back at him for ruining his marriage.

Great story! I also learned something new; now I know what a fucking Hemi is.

Another winner! Off the beaten path and it was a fun tale! What the heck are you eating to come up with such stories every week-is it something in the local water?

I most enjoyed the observation about the “hybrid”. Fun fact-my son said the shop teacher in his “stang was challenged to a race by the physics teacher in her Ford Escape Hybrid SUV. The Hybrid actually beat the ‘stang-For the first 20 feet. After that it was….well comical. The Physics teacher was just trying to show how the electric power to motor was instantaneous vs. transfer of torque. (a fact lost on most every student.)

Keep it up-I have not looked forward to Thursdays so much since FRIENDS was on NBC (showing my age). Thanks for the read

Readers may not realize it, but most of us could easily write a story that scores very well. Ohio and I have discussed it many times. All we need do is have the hero catch his wife cheating, embarrass and divorce her, find a younger woman with bigger tits, and crush the balls of the wife's lover. Any way you write it, readers will call it well written and brilliant, even if the title is not spelled correctly and there is no punctuation. When a writer tries something new, he/she often takes a beating, but it is a needed step to grow and improve. Stang is growing in leaps and bounds. Give him constructive criticism and stand back to see how big he grows. He has artistic courage and that is a wonderful thing.

Yep, that's the only explanation that is reasonable. Between chapter 1 and chapter 2 a formerly dead author, with a lifetime of unfinished plots floating in the ether with him, entered Stang's brain and crammed all of those plot fragments into Stang's story.

Hopefully, Stang will win the fight to take back his soul and we will see more of his good works here in the future.

Dear Mr Stang

My congratulations on fine piece of CREATIVE writing. I throughly enjoyed reading it.

I hadn't realised (as some seem to require) that pieces of CREATIVE writing should also be suitable for publication as a technical reference book/encyclopedia. Of course, such comments may simply reflect the absence of an ability to engage in the process of suspending reality, otherwise known as having an imagination. Such an approach would then indicate that a piece of CREATIVE writing should not be "creative".

As to the debate as to whether the story fits within the LW category, those who appear so distressed about the non-compliance with the the category implicitly impose certain conditions on the category. That approach not only amounts to an argument based on form over substance but necessarily amounts to limiting the CREATIVE aspect of a piece of creative writing.

Please continue with your creative efforts - many of us enjoy and appreciate them. Don't let your creativity be stifled by illogical and misconceived conceptions as some urge.

Sincerely

Sean McD

Stangstar promised it would be wierd and it was, although in a good way. It's an entertaining idea and he manages to explore several plot paths well.

i did find a couple things that felt wrong. First, unlike Stang's best stories, this one just didn't have good character development. Too much about the characters and their histories was revealed late and not explored at all. it's only near the end that we find Charlotte complaining about how Amanda and Sam didn't sleep together. Perhaps this contributed to her problems. We do hear from Amanda that Charlotte had self-esteem issues. Yet, Preston never mentions seeing this. I guess I can understand since he's shown as a huge techno-weenie and mostly interested in machines rather than people.

Second, and this is a bit on the pedantic side. Stang, you start out with Runaway Tech being founded by Sam and basically privately owned, but you give the company a board of directors as if it had sales of $150 mil or more a year. I've worked in machine shops for 15 years, and the corporate structure you generated doesn't work, especially with a techno-geek like Preston in charge. Having dedicated sales people is vital at $50 mil in sales as is having dedicated engineers. I can't see how the business got to the size you describe here considering that limitation. I'm sure most people didn't catch that, but I did and to me it disrupted the flow of the plot quite a bit, since you relied so much on the company taking up huge blocks of time for both Sam and Preston.

do keep writing, you are one of the few who posts regularly and produces stories worth reading.

Yes a writer has to expand, but when a reader comes here expecting clam chowder and getting chicken soup is can be dishearting to them. If this was in a different catagory the read might expect what they got. You see any good auther writes stories for the reader or there is no real reason to write the story. Do you think King, Asimov, Hienlien or Tolkkien wanted to write books nobody wanted to read? Agood writer does not write for himself but for his readers.

I started reading this at about 8pm and now I am scared and can't sleep, Stephen King ain't got nothing on you...great story

My apologies, you are correct. I missed the recantation. My criticism about StangStar06 contradicting himself over Anna's celibate status was incorrect.

I forgot to say that it was cool the way you threw The Bar and Grill in there, Florida too. And yes, he should pray hard for a boy!

I have to say I never would of read this tale if it hadn't been written by you. I'm glad I did as I found it quite interesting and spellbinding. Nicely written and once again thanks for sharing.

Great yarn. Well written & different plot. But it's not the SS06 I'm used to. Not sure if I'll save this one or not.

You indicate the premise is absurd and predictable. It's boring because premise is that anything is possible?

You scoff and suggest that next water will boil at 32F?

Hmmmm ... actually Harry ... water WILL boil at 32F if you lower the atmospheric pressure to around 26 millibars. So given the right conditions, maybe anything IS possible.

As such, one must conclude Palin is a Mensa candidate.

What could possibly happen next?

Hopefully what will happen next is that Stang will write another story next Thursday!

All of the grownups seemed to enjoy your story and offer really serious encouragement to an author with the ability to really write. I thoroughly enjoyed it and hope you will continue to produce "quality" stories. I look forward to Thursdays just because of your postings. FIVE STARS!

What a twist. Bastard son? Great. Didn't see it coming. I love must read Thursday. As much as I love your stories though, Harry just might steal me from you. HIS stories are consistently perfect. Nobel Prize here he comes. HinVa posts on Fridays to show you how it's really done.

I have also read all of MM's works and I love them, but not as much as Harry's. Hip hip for standing up, although I suppose Matt doesn't mind the critique.

Read you next week.

I like your stories and this one was good. However, your adolescent ravings about Ford Mustangs can be a bit tiring. And as a marque, the Mustang name has been made lame by Ford's treatment of it (can you say Mustang II?). But it was your snide comments about the technical tour-de-force know as the Prius that was offensive. You sounded more like a high school twerp than someone who appreciates technology. I personally don't care for many of the design trade-offs Toyota made on the Prius, but it is technically impressive.

Sweet story! ....and to the last commenter... Sorry, but to automotive aficionados there's much more to a car than just providing a platform for technology. In terms a pulse-quickening sensuality and visceral appeal, a Mustang is a very tough act to follow, whereas a Prius... even if the freakin' thing could do moon landings, split atoms and cure cancer... would still have the gut-level appeal of a rolling Pet Rock.

A bit strange but I liked it. But I would have liked to have a decent funeral service for Anna in the Epilog. She did nothing wrong in this story and deserved a proper exit. Thank you for the story Stang. Jim

Yes indeed, this story is very unique. I had serious doubts at the end of Ch.01 that this overall story would be anything but weird. And....it is a bit weird. But in the final analysis, it turned out to be a good story. Uncommon, but entertaining.

Would you consider changing your nom-de-plume to GrimmStar?

Enjoyable reading nevertheless. Well done.

The first time I read this I didn't understand the reference to Rehnquist's toye. Since then I've read all of his stories and know you were referring to your use of Grant City and some of the characters there.

I also appreciate the Mustang refs in all of your stories. I look forward to them. Your comments about the Prius gave me a good chuckle as well.

Thanks again for sharing your talents with us. I see you have several new stories since I last checked. I need to catch up!

Lay off the fucking prius.. Its got pretty decent speed... :-P

I cannot completely agree with the commenter that says a writer on this site should just write to please his readers. Like Ohio and HDK said...any good writer her can follow a certain format that certain readers want to read. It does get kinda boring reading the same old plot. I have said before that I get irritated when a writer tries to twist the plot at the end to please the "kick Em to the Kurb types". Others protest when it is twisted at the end to bring about a reconciliation.

I also get irritated when the wife is made out to be such a totally disrespectful and lying slut when cheating her saint-like husband. Especially when they are described at the first of the story as having a perfect marriage with lots of daily sex and oodles of love shown between them. Thats a contradiction in my mind, and then you have the loving saint-like husband throw the loving and beautiful wife out because she dared to try something one time and got caught.

No matter how she begs or trys to make it up to him he divorces her and takes the children and destroys her life for doing such a dreadful thing even one time to her proud husband. Since she slipped deliberately he cannot forgive her and he instantly falls out of love with her; immediately finding a superior replacement. (Winterfrog and Stang generally have a fantastic replacement)

I can tell you from my experience that it's damn hard to find a superior replacement. It took me several years after the first wife! Help me out Stang. I used to own a new 67 when I came back from Viet-Nam. My 30 year bride has lost interest in sex with me and that might be one to the signs mighten it? She sleeps on the far side of the bed too. Should I throw her ass out and upgrade whether I know she is cheating or not? She is cheating me out of pussy!

But! Since Stang's stories are not all that realistic anyway. Most of us can read and accept all that for the fun we get. So keep up with your unrealistic tales Stang. They are just fiction as you say early on. You described this one as weird aforehand and even the other good writers like them! I may pontificate on some of them a bit but I like em too, and I am not even a writer! Just and old former Combat Marine and 30 year retired State Cop. I love most of your stuff.

where one of the other people who got a donated organ rang the cellphone to say 'I'm back.....'

Great cliff hanger til the end there -

As for who a writer should write for ??? Simple themselves period some are forced to go other directions for work but this is not paid for product write what you want, when you want, because you want simple.

Well done right to the epilogue then it rushed just a bit -

Thanks

Your stories rock. Kinda like Coaster2 and woodmanone. This was so freaky though. I remember reading Chapter 1 on SOLnet but I didn't realise it was incomplete then. Thank goodness you added more because I really hated that it ended with a cliffhanger then as I try and avoid erotic horror, and that was way beyond that haha

However, Preston was described as a nice guy and yet he knocked the person's teeth out at the bar without any justification. It was not self defense. Therefore, I deducted 1*.

I also deducted another 1* because it would have been impossible for Charlotte/Anna, who at the time didn't have much money, to have hired so many professionals. Therefore, I rated the story 3***.

Skipped to the last page (based on the sorry ass first chapter). As suspected (from the sorry ass first chapter), story was a crock of shit. Sorry no zero stars.

Reminds me of the F Paul Wilson story - Sibs. Thank you!

fun read

keep up

the good

work

fun read

keep up

the good

work

super job

keep it up

TY

super job

keep it up

TY

Read it. Liked it a lot. Read it a while ago so I don't recall whatever errors you made in grammar or usage (waits for Stang to breath a sigh of relief)

And that is the important thing. Did I like the story afterwards enough to remember it? Yes and yes.

So well done. I liked the change up in style. I can understand it not being everyone's cup of tea, but then again, I don't like westerns. So I won't RATE a western. An honest reviewer who finds he doesn't like the genre should stop as soon as it becomes evident and refain from rating it since that isn't a fair assessment

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Regarding the genre thing: All the writers get to pick ONE catagory on the site. Unless and until the moderators allow multiple catagorizing, we are stuck with this system. It isn't Stang's fault.

Most stories have multiple elements. Some have incest, some have black guys, some have gang bangs...and if you are JPB, you have all three! You pick the catagory as best you can.

Don't hate at the writer. It isn't his fault. I would have put it here too.

I LIKED THE STORY WELL ENOUGH I GUESS, BUT IT SHOULD HAVE BEEN LISTED IN THE SCI-FI SECTION. I KNOW YOU WARNED US, BUT IF IT HAD BEEN PROPERLY PLACED, I PROBABLY WOULDN'T HAVE READ IT. PLEASE UNDERSTAND THAT YOU ARE ONE OF MY FAVORITE WRITERS, BUT THIS WAS JUST TOO FAR OUT THERE FOR ME.

That about sums it up, this story was yin it was yang it was schizophrenic but a fun ride. Nice one SS

I'm not into longer stories, but this is so good that the more I read the more I wanted. Very well done, a joy to read.

His comments are as enjoyable to read as the stories he critiques. His observation that one should refrain from voting if the reader finds he doesn't like the story was too late for me. But I'll remember it. High fantasy and scifi in LW stories are not my preference.

CHARACTURES ARE UNBELIEVABLY STUPID BUT IT IS A GOOD STORY5AB6

Now I know where Stephen King gets his ideas for his novels!

Seriously,I would like to see this in screenplay.

The first thing I'm struggling with is how the Hell I managed to miss this story. I thought I'd read them all, and then I saw this one and the title was unfamiliar. So one got by me for a little while. No harm, no foul. I just managed to catch it a little late.

I loved it! Yes, it was a long story. Yes, it was definitely weird, to the point that I'm suspecting that you're smoking something interesting to come up with ideas like this. But, for me, it worked.

Let's face it, a lot of these stories are formulaic, including one of my own submissions. I understand that a writer wants to break away from that, and usually catches Hell for doing so. I found that out very painfully with my first submission. But this story, while it did have the eerie "wife coming back from the dead" factor, still contained what a story needs for this site and this category in general.

I still find you to be one of my favorite writers on this site, and I always look forward to your next attempt. I loved this little saga and it will occupy my mind for awhile. Four stars my friend!

To be honest, this story deserves 10 stars. Unbelievably creative and funny. By far, I feel like this is your best story. You really should write more stories with a psychotic girlfriend or wife. Keep up the great work.

-G

Love, sex, violence, fire and a car chase. The only things missing are cowboys and indians. I loved it!

A little sci-fi, action, and love. I LOVE IT.

Awesome work

SangStar06 this is nothing short of totally amazing! I loved this story. Sci-fi meets loving wives erotica...what inventive genius. It doesn't get better than this.

I don't normally enjoy your stories, because the tales are generally too dark. This one was an exciting thriller and fully deserves 5 stars.

To read some of the comments, For me and many others it was a fun story,

My only question for all of those that had the shi--y and uncalled for comments

"If you don't like ss06 or any of his stories why do you keep reading them?."

Just askin

ED

But it was so fucking hackneyed and cheesy towards the end that it became extremely difficult to continue reading. It was B-movie material. You always write your hero as engineers, but engineers usually have some bit of intelligence. Yours don't. You write them as mildly retarded morons as best, which makes the characters unbelievable, and I can't or don't want to relate to them. And we all know you love mustangs, which there's nothing wrong with, we all love something, but devoting entire paragraph after paragraph extolling them becomes very tiresome and irritating after a while and it distracts from the story and makes the reader bored with the hero. You like mustangs,we get it, but maybe tone it down a bit for the sake of the story once in a while.

This one is not your best work, BUT, it is still a Well written story. 4 stars to make you work more on the next one.

This is one of your best I love the supernatural stories ya do.

When Amanda arrived at the plant and didn't see Preston's Mustang, didn't she realize he wasn't there yet and there was no need to go into the plant looking for him?

You did preface that this one was weird, even for you. It was. But somehow, weird works, and is very at home in this category on this site. Thanks Stang.

But it still was a good story. I don't delve into the mysterious, too much about the OUIJA Board running wild and the evil spirits in it haunting the house and torturing and killing the inhabitants. I am afraid of old Mr. Devil and don't like to read about his or his minion's activities. Laugh if you like, I don't mind being laughed at, better than other things.

But then I realized it didn't matter when Preston fell in love with Amanda. She would have little to no chance in a relationship with him at that point

and it doesn't fit into just one category.

Hostile Takeover?

yup

of the company

and Anna

Well, I see KarenE tore a hole in your plot. Pity. I read the first part of this story a long time ago, but not the second. Yep, it started getting weird the first time. Good writing and reading. Cheers!

Betrayal, action,murder suspense and romance.

No super beings and no cuckypoos.Ok maybe Charlotte was a super villain.

What more could you ask for.

Reminiscent of Heinlein's "Fear No Evil", in a truly psycho-bitch-from-Hell sort of way, lol.

Yes, some of the science is dodgy and yes, some of the scenarios are a bit out there but at the end of the day, it's a great story, well written AND IT'S FICTION, GUYS.

Why not just try to enjoy flights of fancy?

5*

Disturbing and entertaining.

It's fiction I know! But please think twilight Zone ! She died came back to life in another girls body ! Now Amanda& Preston are pregnant having a baby?

FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCCCCCKKKKKIN HEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLL.! That's freaking creepy ,! On a scale of 1 to 10 thats a 15 Story is creepy Fantastic! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

This is a crazy story. But I loved it!

I liked it. Even though it was out there. Was moved when Alan bared his soul. Gave me a whole new outlook on him.

A dimension of sight and sound.

Congrats, you've achieved true twilight zone status. 5 stars for this one...

you kind of freed cuck-boy from his whore ...but married him off to a geriatric senior citizen .

disgusting .

When love wins. I was worried it was going to be the old RAAC good guy ends up with the misunderstood slut and it was actually mostly his fault.