All Comments on 'I Arranged It All'

There's a huge difference between the meaning of "cum" which is common slang for an orgasm/semen, and 'come', mixing the the two causes confusion so the author needs to learn the difference.

Cum means to orgasm and Come is a command to walk or move close.

so much waste. Your storytelling is all over. Your grammar and spelling are not the best. I normally don't think that to be a problem, but combined with the meandering story line, it is very distracting. And then you just end abruptly when there clearly is more. I dont mean to discourage you. Just the opposite. Please keep writing. You certainly have potential. Just maybe check out some of the award winners here to see how to improve. Best wishes.

Good story. A better editor should catch misuse errors. (In your clot?)

Pay no attention to those anonymous "critics"

You've got a long history of highly rated stories and those assholes haven't even got the balls to leave their names.

"My hair is red, while hers is blind."

Stuff like this makes me have to stop reading and figure out what's really meant, which takes away from the pleasure of reading the story.

AA++