All Comments on 'I'll Always Take Care of You Ch. 05'

Only a voracious reader can understand the absolute joy I feel when I see a new chapter posted. I am in debt to your exciting storyline and can't wait for more. Please hurry, and thank you so much. Chuck B.

You wanted feedback and while it will not be named it is part of your request.

you have done an excellant job with this story line and i do hope you continue it many chapters to come. please know that I do enjoy your efforts and while i may not take the time to comment i do vote on the stories i read.

Absolutely delightful work. Although I've seldom been particularly entertained with the group sex scenarios, these have been well-written. More importantly, the overall story is thoroughly entertaining. Good work!

-- KK in Texas

But,to be honest it may be the fact that this chapter is still fresh in my mind. The whole story, all five chapters, have the ability to pull the reader into the author's web, and trap the reader through out the whole chapter.There's more to the story than just sex, it's the vivid pictorial that the author has presented that allows the reader to see what is described, and that makes those people in the story just that more alive in my mind.It's like you are reading about people that you care for, and want to see good things happen. Thanks for the chapter, and I will be waiting for the next post.........Rich

brilliant, ive been reading for a cxouple of years now on this site and had started to get bored with the stories, but yours has actually got me excited for the next chapter. it is a briiliant piece of fiction and i hope you continue it for many more chapters. thanks for the read jamie

Can't wait for the next installment. It's the human interactions and emotions that make stories really stand out on this site, and you have done a terrific job on that score.

You've thoroughly hooked me, don't wait too long to write the next installment. I've never left a comment before, I salute you.

get them to us quicker.keep writing your story your way.

That was another great chapter that you wrote. I can hardly wait for the next one and I wish he would be a little quicker on writing these chapters. Please

This is surely my favorite story & you are my favorite author. I'm adding you in my list. I want MORE!!!!!!

Afer each chapter i have felt the need to know more the writing is wonderful. I have learned to love the charactors and to want to see more of their lives. you write a very good tale. please do not stop now.

I'm enjoying the story. I especially like that I'm looking forward to each new chapter. Keep up the good work.

As a story, it's worth 100. But such an elementary howler to start it is unforgivable. Oscar Wilde, a couple of years before Mae West was even born, wrote 'I can resist everything except temptation' [Lady Windermere's Fan (1891), Act 1] If you are going to quote well-known words, do get the source right. Still, it's a super story, for which I thank you heartily. Freddy

Sorry Freddy, I looked up quotations on temptation a day or so before I wrote the intro, and got them confused. Mae West actually said, "I generally avoid temptation, unless I can't resist it."

With head both bloodied and bowed, I admit to human error. Thanks for keeping me honest.

Doc

Am very impressed with the story line. Great character development and solid details. I believe you could even ease up on the sex scenes in lieu of story direction. With so much money involved, the odd little secrets are more important. Sex, in any and all forms, is already a given...as are all the pricey trinquets. Looking forward to your next effort.

Doc,

I have enjoyed reading all parts of this series. However, I have one criticism. As a former language arts teacher, and as a writer, I have been jolted by your repeated use of use when you should have used the past tense form 'used.'

Use, or more properly, 'to use,' is a present tense verb. I use a drill to bore a hole in a piece of wood. Used is the past tense form of the verb; "I used a drill to bore a hole in a piece of wood."

I believe the problem arises because we Americans have become sloppy in enunciating our words clearly and in every day speech, we tend to drop the past dense 'd' or 'ed' from words. That sloppiness carries over into our writing. Unfortunately, the spelling and grammar check in our word processors do not catch this error because the word used is not misspelled.

Please read your work aloud before publishing it. That will allow your ear to catch what your eye missed.

Sincerely,

History Nut

this has to be the best I have read can't wait to read the rest of it

Despite confusing Oscar Wilde for Mae West and the odd grammatical error the story and the characters hold our attention and we await patiently for the next instalment; hopefully not too long!

I have read all of your stories posted here and have greatly enjoyed them. I like the idea of a "treasure hunt" that you have hinted at in the end of chapter 5. I think it would be interesting if some of the clues his father left could be interpreted one way by Davey and yet another way by Ellen which could cause a change in destinies depending on which interpretation he chooses to follow. I truly hope that you are going to release additional chapters of all of your different storylines.

Andy

I wish there was a score higher than 100 as this series deserves one higher. I really enjoyed reading all 5 chapters of this series. They are all fantastic. Please post ch.06 soon & follow it up with the remaining chapters.

love the hint about a treasure hunt at the end of ch 5. will you continue this series?

I CAN'T WAIT FOR CHAPTER SIX.

Please continue the story, its one of the best here

Please continue! Can't wait to read the next chapters.

more brilliant, but...Wow!....

one im leaving this comment annomous to lazy to make a account but your storys are great i feel to many authors are writing short storys that take 5 minutes to read and leave u wondering whats next or start great and finish quickly to save time but u actualy build the story out and give the read more bang for there search so so hands up for u well if i wasnt using them that is lol

I've read almost all of doc87123's stories on Literotica, and he is always interesting with his stories and his characters. He seems to be someone that many of us would enjoy having as a friend, and getting to chat over coffee or a glass of wine with. He isn't degrading to any of his characters, but he certainly knows how to turn the temperature up at all the best times. Hope he keeps writing for a long time !

When i started to read it i thought "You read one story like this ,you have read them all." But the more i read the more i realized that this story is better then all the other stories i have read. So once again, Really Great Story

Well written. BUT! - - - isn't there ALWAYS a "BUT"? LOL

I just have to catch typos, misspellings and grammar errors. (sorry)

"assignation"? I have some doubt that anyone would object to being killed by an "assignation". LOL

Keep on creating great stories. You have an enormous talent. A good proofreader would make your tales flawless.

de Jay

Great work

Just a "nit"...but...the "narrator" of the story is portrayed as a wealthy, educated young man...you'd think he could at least SPELL ""champagne"

so addictive I can't put it down or stop reading it! I do hope that he does marry ellen,because to me they would make a great couple! Keep up the excellent work!

one of the best stories ever!!

This is a really good story; you have a compelling storyline, fleshed out characters and you haven't neglected the inherent eroticism which is so idiosyncratic of this site. I congratulate you, and I hope this series will continue to develop and thrive. I will definitely be there to watch it.

I was going to give you 5 stars for this chapter, until you added the anal sex in. Sorry, but that is a major turn-off for me!

What a great story, can't stop reading it. excellent work. keep on writing.

I am just loving you'r story so please keep continuing to write.

I read this series a year or so ago and really enjoyed it. After reading some other good (and not-so-good) submissions I decided to re-read it and am even more impressed the second time! Good work.

It is 3:30AM and I have just completed Ch5. I do not wish to stop but must. This is by far the best story I have read on this site.

Thank you :-)

Wow , what a nicely, well written story! I love how it ebbs and flows. Great read. I can't wait to read the rest.Thanks, keep up the good work

Just wanted to let you know that I really have enjoyed the storie line. I have found my self skimming over some of the latter sex parts to get more of the storie. Not that I don't enjoy the sex parts. Great job

I love the story so far and I've personally hoped he would Mary Ellen since it started...please keep up the great work im hooked:)

I have been lazy this my first comment on this series. I've enjoyed it so far don't be suprised though if I make no comment on last chapter.I have congestive heart failure so I'm sure you know I stay tired.You've done a fine job keep up the good work.

My God, I can't stop reading this story. Each chapter is getting better. I'm hooked , Im an addict, I want more........5 stars ++++++

Reading the story for a second time. Wish there was more chapters. Maybe you could pick it up again??😀

I love reading your work. I am an avid reader and every time I surf for stories here i always re-read your stories. They are so much better than even some of the newer ones.

This series has definitely been one of the best stories I've read thus far, you really have a gift. Keep up the good work

Another incredible chapter! Can't wait to see what comes next! Regardless, when I finish this series, I will surely start in on the rest of your collection. I love your writing style!

i know it does end, but i hope it never does!!! i love this story!!! well written, great sex.

Champaign is in Illinois.

Champagne is the sparkling wine.

I find stories about sex nonstop sex boring, but you seem to have found the formula to a good story with a strong storyline and romantic and recreational sex thrown in, am looking forward to reading the follow on chapters.

Great story lines, but your editor should use spell check , as well as catching the numerous omissions of key words such as “it”, “she” etc. , where there are a few gaps in the story line. Continue the great lay-out of your characters and the development lines .