All Comments on 'Iron Rain Pt. 03'

Look forward to the next chapter. Try not to wait so long for the next one. LOL

getting better and better...

BUT ITS STILL TOO SHORT... its great make no mistake, but its such a fucking tease at the end of each chapter...

get past that and there is a decent story forming.

The chapter is a bit on the short side and still not too much has been brought out about what he is really into with his college buddies.

I hope to see more soon.

Thanks for the good read.

Seriously, blow this out to about 300 pages total, stick it on iUniverse, and I'd buy it. Sex, high-tech, and the art of the Japanese sword. A few of my favorite things.

The sex is pretty hot and varied enough to be interesting but the story is disjointed. I want to like it but the unrealistic timing and events are killing my ability to focus. I understand that its fiction and thus there's room to fudge reality but this is too much.

But still readable. Not much of a story in this chapter. 5 stars.

I was going to say is there actually going to be any storyline to all this, the last sentence in this chapter tells me YES, Finally………

Enjoying but now it seems to be heading somewhere. 5*. Thank you.