All Comments on 'Leonora Ch. 02'

this writing is not as good as your previous stories, it feels rushed and lacks substance

I enjoy your stories but not this one it has no character

I'm limbering up for a more powerful story. More heavy than usual and more challenging. This like a couple of others waiting publishing are the result of late night early morning writing, never the best.

Just think of them as practice for whats to come.

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storyteller07

The next chapter will be a happy ending, but how?

The ending feels... tacked on. There was a nice build up, with Leonora realising what was happening, little by little finding out more about who was involved. Then, instead of slowly deeping control over her at the office, she was wisked off to nowhere.