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Click hereOne of the infuriating things about fiction is that it must always be more credible than fact. We live in a world of coincidences, dei ex machinai, odd happenings, and strange behaviour on the part of quite ordinary people, but the novelist must make everything seem reasonable and build up to each event, or the reader rejects him. In real life many a situation is completely resolved by a main character's being killed by an automobile, but if we use this device in a story the reader feels flatly cheated.
Thank you for reading. I hope that someone has actually made it through it all. If you have, I hope you don't feel cheated.
- WWC3
- COMMENTS
Valintalmost 6 years agoI more-or-less just skimmed everything after Ch 9, as it basically turned into Christian erotica (which is an interesting sub-genre of its own) and then Christian romance.
I had pretty much zero interest in the sermonizing, and found it incredibly bizarre to have the vehicle for the preaching be a guy who was willing to turn a desperate lesbian rape victim into a prostitute. I must have missed those verses; I mean, I know Jesus was willing to eat with prostitutes, but I don't recall him ever advocating turning those in financial need into them.
A more interesting second-half to the story would have been the protagonist having to adapt his religious beliefs to his relationships, perhaps having to change his views on lesbianism or coming up with a way to mesh polyamory with his beliefs or struggling with loving people in a way that's not socially acceptable but that he deep-down doesn't consider wrong.
As is, the MC came across as the kind of superficial believer who's content to ignore all of his professed beliefs as long as it's about his own convenience and getting himself laid, but as soon as it's about other people's lives, he wants them to hew to the letter of Scripture.
WilCox49over 6 years agoAuthor@The_Pedant
Hmm. That is, probably, the weirdest comment I've ever read on this site. Something more specific might interest me. I have to say that I've seen quite a lot of stories I'd consider weirder, but of course I'm prejudiced.
But it's at least nice that someone apparently read the whole thing and had an actual comment to make. Thank you.
Oh. I like your username, BTW. I might have used that, had I thought of it, and if you hadn't already, of course. Fits me, in any case.
-- WWC3
The_Pedantover 6 years agoThis is, without doubt, the weirdest story I've ever read on this site.
It is just unbelievably daft and way out and away with the fairies!
