All Comments on 'Man of the House'

Well done! Well done indeed.

Wow!

5⭐️ story ,, I love the long build up ,, this needs another chapter to continue with the mom submission fully to her son and his being the dominant one,, just don’t add anyone else in to this story for a 3 or 4 some.

That is my opinion here

5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Great story and really great buildup. This story deserves a 10+

Looking forward for part 2 and more

Out-fucking-standing !!!!! More please.

amazing details..something moat stories miss..could use one more chapter dealing with the afterglow

Great story , great build up , well paced , all in all one hell of a read ,well done and thank you .

WOW 1 awesome story. loved it from start to finish. Hoping for a part 2

Touche!! Encore, Encore!

I loved this story and would love to red more! However I was a little disappointed with the ending after all the buildup. Don’t know what was wrong but I was left expecting, and I’m not sure what! Maybe more story would fill in the gap, and I have no idea what the gap is.. I hope you write more, that’s all it needs. Thanks again and please don’t take this as criticism, but a suggestion.

wow ...now if mom gets pregnant

I would also like to read more of this story. It would be good to find out how he establishes full control of his mother

I'm with Jobewon. I loved the tension and buildup, but the ending just felt hollow to me. He was acting like he wanted her to submit and become HIS, but the ending turned out completely tender and different. I'm not saying tender is BAD or anything, but when you build the entire way with him trying to bring out her submissive side and be dependent on him and all that.....The ending SHOULD flow with that.

Perhaps if you post a second chapter (Which you should post LOTS of chapters) this will all get sorted out.

This story needs to be in 3rd person pov or have the mom's thoughts broken out into their own pov.

You're currently writing this in 1st person limited but kind of breaking into 1st person omniscient for the moms thoughts and it's jarring

Loved it! Hope theres a part 2 soon.

So fucking hot!! Five stars and a favorite point!

I agree with Smokey, the narrative shift was at times a bit awkward, like we were being pulled out of 1st person. Overall a hot story though, and I'd read a sequel if one presented itself

WOW!!! Fan-fucking-tastic story! The build-up was magnificent! I came twice reading it! Awesome read! I wish I could give it more than just 5 stars! 5 + + + + +🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

I loved the build up in this one although I did feel at times there was a lot of unnecessary padding. It's a little sneaky yes, but he's honestly just looking out for his mother and wants her to be happy, and he knows he would be the perfect man for her and would always love, respect, protect and honour her like no other man could. I think that's beautiful.

As the son asked him mom after their first time together, "So, was the long build-up worth it?" Yes, it was :)

Someone else commented on the narrative style and I agree. I wasn't sure how to articulate it but I knew something was off. They pretty much nailed it. I felt like more dialogue was warranted so we could feel their connection a bit more strongly. When it's mostly just descriptive paragraphs, it loses a certain level of intimacy, which is a real shame because this story is clearly between two very deeply in-love people.