All Comments on 'Mom's New Family Affair Ch. 02'

Can't wait for part 3!

I'm looking forward to Beth's seduction of Kate almost as much as the Mother-Son sex. Can't wait to read about the three of them together.

Can't wait to see how it develops further. So far it's been a nice twist so far for the series. It seems "new family" as in Mom's new family affair might have a double meaning too (grin).

This is incredible work. Really, weak in the knees good.

Love the slow buildup. On to chapter three.

Zero ☆ for your grammar. See http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/cases.htm

Consider, too, the words of Terry Pratchett, “Let grammar, punctuation, and spelling into your life! Even the most energetic and wonderful mess has to be turned into sentences.”

Great story and build-up. My dick ad I can overlook the few grammar errors when the story is this good. If you added a little pee or feet into the mix it would be perfect.

I’ve got to say I really fancy Beth, we all need a Beth in our lives.

“A landing strip??” What is going to land there? Mosquitoes? Flies?

I enjoy cooking my family and pets.

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I enjoy cooking, my family, and pets.

Commas save lives, don’t be a psycho.

Not a bad story, but the writing is bad. Either it's written by someone who doesn't read a lot, or it's written by someone whose first language is not English. Either way, I can't read anymore of it. The awkward phrasing pulls me out of the story and kills the mood.

"My eyes floated over the site of her".......?? Site ? Construction site, historical site, the site of a former school. Something seen with the eyes, as in this case, is SIGHT, not site. She was a beautiful sight, the rainbow over the hills was a fantastic sight.......?????????

A good story, spoiled by the author murdering the English language