All Comments on 'Mrs Batman'

Is that going to be your forte?

I like your stories. There are no wasted words or time.

Good start but this would improve with a back story and what happened next.

I liked it but could only give it 3 stars because of comments above.

And clearly better lover than that asshat who calls him self “Lyons”. He has lost her to the better man and she should be celebrating, not caterwauling in grief.

after a long time got to read a good story.

Stop wasting our time with the less than 750 word stories!

and straight to the point

love it

5starrs

Pretty creative, and straight to the point. I liked it.

Thanks for the story.

Cog

Another very good flash story from this writer...And I'll use the same comment: "Short and to the point...No unnecessary details and talks"...4*

Once was clever with 'Return to Sender'. Twice is tolerable but having elements of sameness.

It's getting a bit like feeding the wife-haters with quick morsels.

I hope there isn't a third Ankur story with a similar bent.

Lue

You write excellent flash stories!

Your doing something right when luedon dislikes it

To these folks, I'll remind you that you do not have to visit Literotica. And that you can ask for a return of the fees you paid to access the site.

Thanks for writing.

Don't listen to luedon, he just jealous. Well done!!!

PS: keep making more (if you can), they are great little read. 5

Who are you going to prove right?

The clown who thinks that excellence only comes in boringly long diatribes, or your own sense of excellence and timing?

Five of those uncomfortable pointy things for a complete and excellent read - thanks!

. . . this one was good. It gave us the clue as to how Mr Lyons knew that Mrs Lyons had dallied with Mr Wayne. Perhaps Mr Lyons had suspected but was unsure, and room service had given him the last clue hue needed, or perhaps not, but we were given the one piece of evidence we needed to make a very short story complete nevertheless.

Brevity is the soul. keep 'em coming.

@luedon I hope they're all this good.

very clever and easy to get a chuckle from...thanks

Well, I guess I would have like seeing the consequences, but I think any long-time reader, let alone writer, can see where this marriage is going.

Back story? Why? The met, dated, fell in love, got married, were apparently happy. He traveled a lot and she cheated with her boss.

Extra points for a unique way of discovery.

The affair has been going on long enough for a hotel employee to know her by name! And she might have been the room service wait person every time!

Ignore the haters, we need more high quality Flash Stories like this. Just keep the quality up.

Too short

From the mouth of an innocent babe, all is revealed. Succinct, clever and highly entertaining. Thank you.

We like it. And Mikie likes it too.

We like more story sometimes but this writer is able to tell the full story with a few words. I’m sure ankur will have a longer tale or two but I like these short ones so far

Now two great short stories. Appreciate your efforts!

Wanting more to this story is not a criticism but a tribute. It can stand alone but ... FTDS you out there?

Why so serious?

Good short but I like to read a real longer story from you.!

The Martian Slut Ray claims another faithless wife....

Fun little flash, thanks!

She might NOT have been the room service person every time. So if it takes, say, five visits to learn a visitor's name, and she's the person every other time, that would mean she stayed there at least TEN times!

This was a fun read until I thought about it and realized how dumb the room service attendant was...

If she remembers Mrs Wayne, surely she notices that she’s with a different man

She’s working the Presidential suite and the manager’s actions are even noted as seeing that as a big deal so she’s presumably competent and discrete

She may not have been sure guy #2 was the husband, or may have thought guy #1 WAS, and the woman may or may not have checked in as Mrs Wayne the first time (although the ‘Mr Wayne, like batman’ joke was known to be her boss’ ‘thing’ so she prob just assumed), but the attendant certainly shouldn’t have called her ‘Mrs’ ANYTHING with a different guy in her room.

She even had a chance to realize this and say she was mistaken but didn’t

And once again I’m overthinking porn...

You are quite the shootist.

now that is what a smart man does

gets rid of the garbage

no need for excuses

no need for tears

no need for garbage

because cheaters whether male or female are just that GARBAGE

5* 1000 hardons and a tingling in my balls

Normally I don’t like very short flash stories but you nailed this one.

Quite creative. Well done.

Loved it!

I can't recall ever reading a discovery method like that. Thank you.

Original discovery idea!!!!! Keep 'em coming!

Short and not sweet

Very Good. Two very good short stories in a row. You captured most of the necessary back ground using the reader's memory and experiences.

He's got a lot of money. She's going to get at least half of that money, their house and half his retirement. Which means she's free to do anything she wants. Including taking a younger lover or even a more wealthy lover. He gets screwed. Poorly thought out story that has too little information in it.

2 stars

Right to the issue.

I find myself in a rare agreement with RR.

Unlike "Return to Sender." that while good, left a lot to be said.

Here, we learned all we needed to know in two sentences:

"welcome back Mrs....Wayne right? Like Batman..."

Having heard my wife's boss introduce himself with: "Bruce Wayne, you know, like Batman.."

If that didn't tell you all you needed to know, there was this sentence:

"I think you'll find my last name is Lyons..."

... but funny and well done.

4-stars

To Anon: if any of what you wrote here was the least bit true, then Savannah would be crying her eyes' out at the end of the story, wouldn't she?

Be logical. Make your assumption solely based on what the author wrote, not on what you wished he wrote.

You have a knack for those flashes, author.

I wouldn't mind reading a longer story from you, eventually, but, if this is type of stories you only want to write... keep them coming!

Hell, you're even making my comments shorter... crazy voodoo you got going!

keep them coming love short to the point stories

I wanted it to go on and on, delve into the reasons for the infidelity, but I am sure selfishness , lust and sense that the rules dont apply to her all factored in as usual.

I'm getting too old to read this stuff, I missed the entire Mrs. Wayne tell. Good story, writer.

I had two somewhat contradictory thoughts here:

"If she remembers Mrs Wayne, surely she notices that she’s with a different man" -

1) The husband was in the bathroom, She didn't see him.

2) Would the name be on the room service slip? If so, wouldn't the server be expecting "Lyons"? Or was she so surprised to see "Mrs. Wayne" that she blurted it out, there WAS some hesitation, as if she was confused that the woman she recognized didn't match the name on the slip.

Another good flash story. I usually like the psychology about why people do what they do, but this was a nice flash story. Part of it was that no questions were brought up that require answering in a longer story.

While these shorts have been good, you're too good of a writer, so I hope this doesn't become your exclusive endeavors.

Very good, quick and to the point for that cheater.

Exactly the right length. You started with something to say and hit submit when you'd said it.

How they met. Irrelevant.

What they look like. Irrelevant.

What they were wearing or had for breakfast. Irrelevant.

The fact she cheated. Critical.

Very nicely done.

Never going to be five stars for me at this length, but a solid four.

Caught in the Batman’s web. You naughty girl.

Couldn't she have said, " The suite is booked as double occupancy, all my clothes are hanging in the closet, and I can describe them here and now. He's playing an evil joke on me."

Brevity is an art form. This story had everything it needed and nothing more. I liked it!

For those who appreciated the 750 word contest, this is how you do it!

You are steady ringing them up, Sir.

A tip o’ the hat.

Yawn

I liked both of Ankur's stories. Sure they are brief, but they hit like Mike Tyson and last as long as some of his early fights.

Right now his stories are like an inexperienced young man in bed: lots of enthusiasm, over with quick, but hopefully will get better with time by adding a little foreplay. (smile)

The perfect length and great Bang for the buck!

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Story well told! Thanks for sharing.

Brevity that soul of wit, finds mirth in how your stuff is writ

And rests without a curious itch, with sev-five-one you burned the bitch.

"Couldn't she have said, " The suite is booked as double occupancy, all my clothes are hanging in the closet, and I can describe them here and now. He's playing an evil joke on me.""

I don't see your point. He's not trying to convince the hotel staff as if they were some sort of a jury. Of course she's really his wife (for now!), but as soon as he's packed, he's out of there and she can go into the room.

Unlike some others, I have no problem with short, let's call them "super flash" stories.

My complaint, as I have said before, that absent the rules of an event, there's no need to try to get to exactly 750 words (or close, depending on who's counting).

"Return to Sender" was a good story that was hampered by things that were left out in the attempt to get down to 750 words. This story was just about perfect. As I said in my original comment, we learned all we needed to know in two sentences.

This story had a nice unexpected twist that I didn't see coming. Sweet revenge made me laugh.

If you have to have an affair, pick a Motel 6. Nobody there will remember your name.

"Re: Good. Now she can be with a better, wealthier

To Anon: if any of what you wrote here was the least bit true, then Savannah would be crying her eyes' out at the end of the story, wouldn't she?"

I know that it goes very much against the grain in LW, but is it possible that Savannah loved her husband and didn't want to lose him?

It's pretty much a standard comment here: 'she couldn't have loved him or she wouldn't have cheated.' But people who love their spouses cheat all the time. They might just want something exciting on the side, they might find their spouses not all that good in bed, heck, they may love two different people at the same time -- another shocking concept, I know -- all sorts of different reasons.

Lots of married women don't have the same last name as their husbands. My wife still uses her family last name. Still, point made . . . nice little short story.

Short and sweet and to the point! Burn the bitch ... no quarter given .. scorched earth - PERIOD!!! 5-Stars!!!!

Some married women don't use their husbands' last names. Good point! That would explain the room service person not being overly concerned if the slip said "Lyons" but the woman was "Wayne."

Of course, that doesn't explain how she knew her as "Mrs. Wayne," LOL!

Great job; everything we needed to know in a nice little package. MS Word counted 749, not including the title, and I think this is the best flash story I've read. Well written, concise, and complete. Thanks for posting, it was thoroughly enjoyed. Full marks.

I saw an article recently in which it was suggested that sex between a man and a woman has three purposes: Recreational, Procreational & Relational. Sometimes all three at once, often just one, occasionally two of them together.

I tend to believe that for the last two, it is better if the man and the woman are in a long-term committed relationship such as marriage. Not necessarily so with the first one. Single people generally confine themselves to recreational sex until they decide to commit themselves to a relationship.

But, as RR says, "people who love their spouses cheat all the time. They might just want something exciting on the side". Sex in its recreational purpose may provide that 'something exciting'. Why not? It doesn't have to be that it isn't exciting at home, it's just a bit of added excitement. So long as it stays recreational and doesn't become procreational or relational.

Lue

Once again, ankur257 nailed it spot-on. What a surprise twist. ankur257 for President!

Recreational sex is fine and wonderful as long as both people are single or are in open relationships, or the recreational sex is between the two partners!

But if Spouses A1 and A2 are in a committed, closed relationship, Spouse A1 or A2 can't have recreational sex with Person B, no matter how much fun it may be without cheating.

If Spouse A craves recreational sex with Person B, he/she MUST go to their partner. If their partner agrees, they also must accept the possibility that their partner will expect the same privilege, which unless they want to forget Person B, they must accept without recriminations.

Finally, if their partner either refuses, or they can't accept a reciprocal arrangement, they must somehow forget Person B, or give their partner a fair divorce, at which point they are now single and have all the recreational sex they want.

I know there are those who disagree with me, but given the popularity of Consequences stories, where a spouse ignores these rules, I think most readers in LW pretty much agree with me.. I would hazard a guess that some think I'm too lenient, that just getting to that point with Person B is death to the marriage!

"So long as it stays recreational and doesn't become procreational or relational." – So, cheating is okay as long as it's only recreational, the famous. "It was just sex," excuse?

I think that "recreational sex" is just Lue's idea of the exciting little extra, and is thus fine is the basis of her view on infidelity. A little cheating is cute,justifiable, and just good, clean fun for those involved. It's no big deal if the betrayed spouse might not agree with this. The fact that quite a few of us don't agree with her/them is the cause of her vocal dislike for the Moral Brigade.

I think they do too, SB. BTB stories are decidedly the ones that get the highest scores and the most favourable comments. But LW readers are a weird mob.

As ReedRichards said, 'cheating' is done by a lot of people looking for a bit of extra 'recreational sex' -- sex of the 'it was only sex, dear' kind. What people do in the real world is a bit different from what people say they should do.

The question that I ask these days is "why do people think that 'recreational sex' is the same as 'relational sex'. I agree that having relational sex with a person who is not your spouse would be cheating, but why can people not see that 'it was only sex, dear' may genuinely not be cheating?

Lue

"If she remembers Mrs Wayne, surely she notices that she’s with a different man"

Not necessarily. They're staying in the Presidential Suite, so it's not just an ordinary hotel room. Often the bed isn't visible from the doorway in a suite like that, as the door opens into a lounge.

The hotel girl would be interacting with whoever opened the door and if the wife was screwing the boss, she already had a subservient relationship with her lover. The arrogant jerkoff was fucking another man's wife... asking her to get the door for room service isn't much of a stretch.

So then the wife obviously joked around with the hotel girl, making the same joke about the Wayne surname in her post-orgasmic euphoria. The hotel girl remembered, was obviously pleased to see her again... and the cheating whore's life came crashing down around her ears.

A very well crafted with a lot packed into such a small number of words.

"The question that I ask these days is "why do people think that 'recreational sex' is the same as 'relational sex'. I agree that having relational sex with a person who is not your spouse would be cheating, but why can people not see that 'it was only sex, dear' may genuinely not be cheating?"

Um, because we DON'T think that "recreational sex" is the same as "relational sex." They ARE different. But what is NOT different is that if done without your partner's consent it's still cheating!

Hell, I wouldn't join a bowling league without telling my wife! Obviously, I hope, I wouldn't need to ask her permission, LOL, but I wouldn't suddenly simply start not coming home straight from work Wednesdays because I joined a league.

I'm trying to come up with a real world example. Let's say a couple are jointly saving for an anniversary trip to Hawaii. In Case A, the wife takes the money and buys herself a piece of jewelry that she's always wanted. In Case B, she takes it and buys her husband the sports car he's always wanted, Case A was selfish, Case B was generous, but in BOTH cases she made a unilateral decision on something that was important to both of them, and in both cases she was wrong.

It doesn't matter whether the bed was visible or not! He was in the bathroom, with the door open a crack.

"Hi dear, I saw Fred today. I haven't seen him for such a long time, so we went and had lunch together."

"Hi dear, I saw Fred today. I haven't seen him for such a long time, so we went and had sex together."

In most Western cultures, the first one would be accepted by the husband as something she did without phoning to tell him what she was doing (assuming that Fred wasn't a person he disliked.) What's so different about the second one, so long as 'it was only sex'?

In several Arabic cultures, she might have seen Fred, but Fred wouldn't have seen more of her than her eyes, hands and feet. You can't see much of her when she's wearing a burka. She wouldn't even speak to Fred without her husband being there and giving his permission.

Most Western cultures have moved beyond that, and wives make independent decisions in the same way that husbands do. But somehow the decision to have extra-marital 'recreational sex', is still seen as a decision neither spouse should make.

Some European cultures have moved beyond the Anglophone ones with their attitudes to extra-marital 'recreational sex'. And some of those who departed England to escape what it had become became more restrictive rather than less.

Lue

Try reading Ann Douglas' story 'Towaszysz' for a sweet little story about a supposed European country's cultural practice. It's in the Mature category, so those who only read LW category stories will have missed it.

Lue

My point is, 26thNC, as you say, it's "the exciting little extra, and is thus fine is the basis of her view on infidelity".

On the other hand, I do not believe that "It's no big deal if the betrayed spouse might not agree with this". It certainly is a big deal if somebody has decided to feel hurt by a spouse's actions.

My question is "Why should the spouse see it as 'betrayal' and why not agree with it?" After all, it's only sex.

Lue

"why can people not see that 'it was only sex, dear' may genuinely not be cheating?" - Because for them it IS cheating! Hey, if you and your husband are okay with each of you having "just sex," go for it, but please stop trying to convert us, it only results in these go nowhere arguments. BTW, if it's NOT cheating, then why is it done in secret? Because at least with the people here, "It's just sex" IS cheating!

If you have a cogent argument to make, you know my email, I'm sorry I let you pull me into your circus tent any more.

But perhaps you could try a full story instead of just snippets.

Not a "loving Wives" story, definitely not erotic, why isnt this on cheat.com or caught.com instead?

Not every story has to be several pages. I don't care for arbitrarily shortened stories, this author's "Return to Sender" a prime example.

This story, however, was short and sweet, gave us all the information we needed.

It's like jokes - some are long, involved stories, some shorter, then there are the one-liners. They all have their merits, and should be admired (or not) based on what they are, not on what they are not.

Listen, most of us have our ideas of what should or should not be on Lit in general or LW in particular. Most of us have also learned that nothing is going to change, so bitching about it isn't going to change.

As long as Lit gets the clicks to attract advertisers, it's not going to change.

Keep going please

The comments are longer than the story! You deserve an award or something.

I like a good story and this was good. I don't prefer short-shorts, but I don't object if they're well written as this one was. I don't particularly enjoy BTB stories (as Luedon assumes to be the only readers who would give this story high marks).

If it matters, I prefer what I would call "near miss" stories, and there are very few stories like that on this site.

Keep writing please!

I loved this one, but I also would like to see an aftermath. Keep up the great work and I hope you write a full story sometime.

C’mon folks, lighten up. It’s all there. Compact, concise, clear as a bell. No extraneous fluff.

Got my 5.

Throw away BTB story, not worth the seconds it took to read

I liked it. No matter what others say.

I liked it. No matter what others say.

Of called her robin, " to the bat pole robin"....sorry, couldnt resist. 5

A man who wasn’t afraid to make quick, accurate decisions.