All Comments on 'My Mom the Sex Therapist'

I enjoyed the angle you chose. You could have taken it further and drawn it out a little longer, but likely just as many readers appreciate short and sweet as they do long and deep. All else I'll say is not to rush the writing process itself. Let the dialogue escalate in your mind. Obsess over the words you want to hear and think how you'd get there.

There were noticeable mistakes but I could let enough of them slide out of enjoying what you brought. Just a little more effort and I really doubt you'd need an editor at all. Good effort :)

I liked your story line but you need a little editing.

Know the difference between your an you're, body's and bodies,

fell and feel. Still gave you a 4*

I almost came just reading the story. Awesome writing.

wow this chapter really got me going hope this story continues

All mothers and sons should experience such beautiful uninhibited love

Well, OK. Some parts seem a bit "clinical" and you could do away with that.

I've always thought a shake of the head was a negative and a nod was an affirmative, but Jr. doesn't like Mommy's private parts? Please, in a house where sex is some what open and cavalier?

Aside from a few grammar errors, I enjoyed it. I'd like to see more of this story.

Very exciting read. Try expanding this into more chapters?? Look forward to any additional writing you might do.

Dads out of town, Moms horny, Mom fucks son. end of story

Positive, I got hard reading your story. Suggestion, slow down the seduction and let sexual relationship develop over time. The positive far owtweighs the suggestion.

A little bit boring. No character development. No real story.

You really need to think about what your writing, also how its written too.

Like the others say, slow down, in real life does it happen like that, no it doesn't, plus this is a story so we need descriptions of the characters, plus try not to fall into the "dads away trap" also if mom was a sex therapist she would have knowledge of incest already, what she needed to do was to expand it and incorporate you into it all.

The idea was very good, but too many negatives for me on your compilation sorry!

Try to remember, if you were reading your story for the first time, verses the regular writers on here (you must read them as you,ve written this) think about their style of compilation, and then add your own personality as you progress.

I'm only a private amateur writer, unpublished as still learning myself, but sorry to say, you do need much help !!

Such a good idea but needs more thought and deliberation to make it really work

Please learn the difference between your and you're

Your story idea is actually good, but the execution is bad due to your horrible grammar. My recommendation would be to solicit the help of someone on Literotoca to review and edit your next attempt at writing erotic fiction.

Just needs more content and not make the incest so easy. ***

She wanted to have her son. She pretended it as if there was a case of incest but she really wanted to have her son as a love partner. Some women want the young man enough to take one. I have been there...

nice start. keep going only praktice helps same goes for me.

Wish you were my mommy! I would love to put my penis back in your womb!

5 stars. What a great job she has

Very clunky writing, very little imagination or details, build up was incredibly sloppy and cliche, awful sentence structure and grammar, the author doesn't grasp the difference between you're and your as well as the lack of contractions resulted in the annoying robotic unrealistic dialogue between the characters that you see so often on Literotica, "I will go to the store" vs "I'll go to the store" ask yourself which one sounds like a cyborg failing to play a human being and which one is how people actually talk, i don't understand how these dunces write pages and pages of stale robot dialogue and don't think it sounds weird AF "I will be going to the store as I have said that I will do and then I will go to the office... beep boop bop beep" and finally the author must have the sexual endurance of a moth because he gave that trait to the main character, yet another 5 sentence boring as hell sex scene, awful story