by vjl84
Very revealing story. The desire must be resolved. The sooner an honest and positive attempt is made the better.
Ok so we've got the main character brooding... but we have very little story development or arc. This is essentially a published outline. Keep going with it!
About as generic a story as it could be. No description of characters, no build up... Honestly this just seems like some 15yr olds bad fantasy wrote up in 2 minutes.
This is only good for the premature ejaculators. Not even worth the time it took to read it. Get a life that doesn't involve you blowing yourself.
I can't believe how crappy this story was. This is the first one of your stories I've read and I think I can say that I wouldn't read another one of yours if you held a gun to my head. God, this sucked!
if she's your mother and your obviously wanting her. Treat her right.
IF.....you're lucky enough to get it...appreciate it. No need to degrade her with the mean names.
I see a reader has commented, "God, this sucked!" Well, I couldn't agree more.
I find it hard to put into words how fucking awful this was. Please, please grow up a little before you submit another story.
I didn't think it was all that bad. It reminded of my mom. Two years after my dad passed my mom asked to see my dick. Mom was a horny woman accustomed to having sex regularly. She left her worn panties in the bathroom and I sniffed that sweet sexy pussy scent she left on them.