by mindgames95
Absolutely fantastic. I loved every word of it. It would be amazing to have some more, but I am deeply satisfied to have it just as is. Well done.
<br>Read it! Read it now if you haven't done so yet! </br>
This story was freaking amazing. Matt's character was original and real, and so was Mark's. It's refreshing to read about two people not jumping into sex the moment they meet, even when the opportunity arose.
Not to mention the fact that they're nothing alike makes the attraction even hotter, sweeter :P I recommend this to anyone who's into M/M sex. ~L.
That was heartwarming, believable and most importantly realistic. Lovely. Please write some more. You have the talent. Cat
It's been a while since I felt moved to leave a comment on a story, but I loved, loved, loved this one. Sweetly erotic. And the character development is brilliant; you allowed us to get to know him without whacking us on the head with a 2x4 and explaining his "issues." Def one of my faves. Just brilliant.
Great story, loved every minute and every line kept pulling me back. Hope u continue to write more stories, its been a while since a story kept me this enthralled.
This story was beautiful, tender and heartfelt. Thank you.
thank you for sharing it with us!!! I cant wait to read more of your writings!
One of the BEST I have read yet! This story is so different. Are you going to add more to it? This is soooooooooooo good and should definitely be made into a chapter series! PLEASE! It's too good to just let it stop here! OMG! Loved this! Please continue with these characters! Love them all!
Exquisitely well done. Thank you for a lovely 3-dimensional story.
What a happy surprise! I was unsure as a started to read this story but got drawn in with every sentence. Thanking for sharing your talent with us.
One of the most perfect stories that I've read on here. Character, plot, dialogue, pace - everything was so exquisitely perfect. The fact that 95% of the story was not about sex says so much about this incredibly well written story.
This story is filled with everything......erotism romance, and happiness. Keep writing...you have talent. I.V.
I've never commented on any stories, but this was amazing. Would love to see it done from Mark's point of view.
Excellent writing. One of my favorites. I'd love to hear marks pov as well as i found him a very interesting character and would love to know more about him. Again though fantastic piece of writing.
Very nicely done. A good build up of sexual tension before the delivery. Excellent!
Two characters who show that they're more than their stereotypes. I love that neither of them is exactly who he seemed to be on first glance. I love the growth in the main character over time. The final scene was well written and hot.
Just wanted to say what a great story I thought this was, it flowed really well and had two really different but likeable characters. I hope you write some more!
What a superb study of love and how it grows! Sweet sex? Oh, yeah! But what's important is love's varieties, some deeply emotional, some rationally experiential, some simply habitual & hormonal. Waves of mystery and confusion swirl around a budding relationship. Eventually there is a dawning of mutual awareness which may (MAY, that is) with devotion and commitment become a permanent process of ever-changing varieties of joy. Meantime, let's get naked and down to it! Damn, but I LOVE this story, even the aspects I do not understand.
this is probably the best short story i have read, its just so touching and deep, i love the detail and the emotions you bring to your characters. please write more!
This story was written very well. I loved that neither main character was as they first appeared. This story was great that it built up to the sex and the tension was extreme. A pov from Mark would be great to see everything from his perspective, but otherwise i really enjoyed this story.
There is some juicy hot sex here! But I wish that our aging model would figure out some way to grow up and find himself. The way it is (mainly well written, by the way), the sex is mostly so casual and careless as to be pointless. We need to know more about his role as father figure to the neighbor's little boy. His fine character in doing that lovingly is what draws Mark (a real strangeling) to him. Sequel is called for, but I don't want to read any more about this jackoff.
I loved how you showed the slow emotional growth that Matt was experiencing through meeting his match in a mature Mark. I also loved how you showed that first impressions and assumptions can be wrong and that friends don't require anything but true friendship in return. I agree with another reader's comment that it would have been interesting to hear Mark's POV during Matt's journey, but I like the story just as well as it stands. I hope you keep writing and I really hope that you'll continue to share your stories with us.
I really enjoyed this. Mark was sooo intense.PLEASE give us more of that. I thought it was written very well. Thank You.
You are a very talented writer. The way you expressed the depth of their feeling was touching.
You MUST write more......soon!
over the sweetness of Mark's advances, at the sincerity of the emotions you depict, and at the thrill you give your readers by guiding us through the perplexing maze of amorous pursuit. Bravo, I loved this story and hope to see much more from you in the future. Good luck!
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Wow, that was really good. You have a well written, involved story here with great emotion and great sex. Definitely a favorite of mine.
This story had great flow and build up to a sweet ending. I liked the main character but it would be great to know a little more about Mark. although you did hint at his patient and observant nature that subtly helped Matt to change. I know I've submitted a comment on this story before but after reading it once again and with all previous comments missing, I wanted to say great job and thanks for sharing once again. I just wish you'd submit more. It's been a year since your last story and I keep looking for more.
This is my first time commenting on a story on this site. I just wanted to say I loved it and I hope you make more stories. This is definitely one of my favorite stories that I''ve read. Great job.
I think this is one of the smartest, most well-written pieces on this site. Even though I've read it several times, I still find my heart tightening up with emotion at several places in the story. Selfishly, I'm really hoping that you will write more for us someday!
This is my first such comment. Wonderful piece. I could see the ending but how you got there was marvelous, and a surprise. Please write more.
mark (s)
And not even the usual way. This story, the intensity that the build up put in, the characters, the events....
IT WAS AMAZING. GORGEOUS. I couldn't--I just-- wow.
~mozzarella
I love this story. I want more, I hope you write a little more about them. On their lives after that night. I've read this story at least 10 times and I can't get enough.
this story is so wonderfully written and realistic, one of my top stories on literotica ever. i wonder if you are going to post more stories because i would honestly love to read more from you.
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I would really like to hear more of Mark's version now please
This is assuredly one of my favorite stories that I have read. I am a person that needs every book and story to have an epilogue, just because I'm not ready for it to be over. But I must say this story ended prefectly. The complicated simplicity of it was exactly what the characters and story personified.
This is by far my favourite story on this site - the writing is excellent and the story is lovely. Thank you for sharing and please keep up the fab work :)
I can't help saying "awwww" after I finish reading this story. It's a unique romance. Funny, endearing and with a happily ever after ending, perfect! I'm hoping that you will be submitting more stories for us soon, you are a talent! Thank You!
So good I wish there was more. Totally adorable.
I've read this story so many times, and I still love it as much as I did the very first time. It's a beautiful story with great characters, and it's well written and perfectly structured - you have a gift and I really hope you continue your writing. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Creative, well-written, great dialogue, naturalistic characters – the goods. Everything works, and oh so perfectly. A very fine romance. Specially love the way you contrast the bored cynicism of the one, with the humanism of another, and the taciturn self-discipline of the third. Well Done!
I have read this story so many times and I love it each time!!
I just wish there was more!
I never commented on this site before, but I've read this story so many times now-- revisiting over the past couple of years. It's my favorite. I really relate to the complexity of Matt's self-hate. The approach of the writing itself was very intelligent and I love the style. It's a beautiful story and thanks for it.
This is my first reading of this story but undoubtedly it will not be my last. The depth and growth of the characters in this story is not often found published works of fiction. This story has just catapulted into first place in my heart. I would have given 'Not His Type' 10 stars if the rating system had allowed. Please continue to write.You have a gift. Loved it,loved it,loved it!!
This is the best story I've read on Literotica, and I'm sad that you appear to have disappeared. I keep coming back and re-reading it. Hopefully you will come back and post more!
It took me a while to find this but it was worth the wait. I love these kind of stories. Well written, just the right amount of sex. Bravo!
I simply to say loved it very much that I favorited it. The characters have some flaws like a normal person and also have some unique personalities and quality. And I loved the smex scenes :) hehe
It was well written indeed, although the story itself did not appeal to me at all. Lechery is a sign of a weak character and thus pathetic, so my idea of a happy ending was more like him ending under a bus. Mark somehow becoming attracted to him was also a development which I did not completely understand; one nice trait in a person (being nice to the kid) hardly makes his many vices evaporate. But well, thats just my moral ranting on the substance; the writing was excellent ;).
I like this story a lot and the people in it. It was odd having only Matt's point of view and not Mark's but it worked for this story. I'm glad Matt found the love he had never had and didn't even know he needed.
Personality extremes; Matt is a self-serving asshole who gives homeless men cigarettes and like's his neighbor's kid, but you could tell that his insecuirty and empty lifestyle was getting to him. Not sure of Mark's motivation other than seeing a slightly different side than he expected.
"Why not?" I asked finally. I wasn't upset, just curious. Whatever it was we'd work around it, and if not, I honestly didn't care,
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he doesn't care??? then why did he ask a question if he didn't care??
i immediately didn't like your matt character. i'm guessing you wanted us to get that impression of a self-absorbed ass hole. i still didn't like him by the end of the 1st page/chap- so i skipped to the last page and i still didn't like him.
it wasn't a horrible story though- you tell/write a good story- characters, dialogs, settings, etc
I LOVE THIS STORY! Read it at least 20 times if not more. What is wrong with all these comments lately?! People, you are seriously missing the point about Matt. He build this whole cocky facade about him and Mark saw right through it. If you want to start quoting the story why not go for:
"Only because I was afraid no-one else would remember or care. Better not to test the relationships one had at all.
Ok, so I had abandonment issues. The fear of somehow being unlovable was a monster in the darkness of my life. The sting of rejection with me was the sharp edge of a knife."
His mom ran out on him and his dad was a hateful asshole. Of course he has issues. Stop judging his public mask and look below the surface.
FAN~FREAKIN~TAS~TIC!!! Loved all the details, interplay, dancing around, and what seemed to be will-never-end, games; before the supurb climax. Five star read ALL the way!
I love the way you write, the way you explain things, the fact that this is so different from the usual stories. Your all in his head, in his emotions, you have your readers feeling what they feel, sympathizing even. beautiful.
That was really beautiful. I love all the undercurrents of there being more to him than meets the eye, but having him still be shallow in so many ways. Having Mark be a challenge in the beginning, whose standing on principle led to him re-evaluating who he was and what he wanted. I loved the ways Mark showed he was anything but unmoved by him when he gave him a pet and threw him a party. I loved how he saw right threw him. It was a really well-done and beautiful story.
OMG! This is a hell of a story! The twists and all that was fantastic! The story really thrilled me as it went further! The cat, the party and the Im not your type either part was great!
Time after time I come back to this story, and it never disappoints!
This story always makes me cry. Matt is so sweet and so needy until Mark comes along and sees the true person behind the mask. Love it.
I read this story over and over...it is sooo greatly written and it is really nice how the two boys discovered each other.
I love this story and your style showing real insight into the human condition. Even as a mature hertero female coming from a loving home I can really identify with Matt and live vicariously for a moment hoping my "Mark" turns up one day in my life. Thanks for sharing.
ok so that was intense and ridiculously well written and fabulous. well done in a big way. i loved every part, which sort of surprised me, and i really liked the way stuff that didn't make Matt feel anything was just glossed over, very cool.
I feel like i wanted more in the ending, but then it would have been too-too-cute.
i can tell that i'll keep coming back to this one
Makes me wish for a "Mark" of my own! You've done very well...Matt and Mark are real, and thoroughly likable!
One of the best I've read. Not just on this site, but anywhere. Thank you so much.
Well done. You wrote a story about a slut and made him not-a-slut. You wrote a romance. How I wish more people here would write romance.
Oh no! Your story is excellent, but you've only written one story! Please (pretty please!) could we have some more?
Mark found out that someone he rejected at first finally made him realize what he wasn't getting from his fast tricks in the restroom.
I THINK THAT YOUR STORY IS ONE OF THE BEST ON THIS SIGHT. HOW I WISH THAT YOU RETURN HERE WITH MORE OF YOUR WORKS.ANYWAY , THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS GEM OF A SHORT NOVELLA , WITH ITS DEFINITELY AMASING COMPOSITION OF THE PLOT AND GREAT DEPICTION OF ALL THE CHARACTERS, AND THEIR EVOLVING WITH THEIR RELATIONS ,AS IF I WAS FOLLOWING SCIENES FROM THE REAL LIFE.
excellently written and exceptionally narrated. among my personal favorites and am sure a lot of readers will agree with me when i say we would love to read some more from you.
This is by far the best story of all genres I have read on this site. I sincerely hope, encourage, and pray that this is not your last story. Thank you for your efforts.
This was wonderful! One of the best stories I've ever read on this site. Stellar writing and superb story line. Simply amazing!
Your characters are real, believable and with a lot of depth. You've all the hallmarks of being a good writer with a scope of expanding your horizons and ameliorating what is already a first rate writing. More power to you, brother !
I came to this story on suggestion from another one, and I am so glad I did. I found myself reading with wonder and intent, not knowing how the story would end and then wanting to read more once it was over. This is so much more than the standard erotica. I hope to read more from you. Peace.
This story is amazing and I love the way it moved. I thought it was great how Mark actually saw who Matt real was. Keep up the great writing! We all want more.
I realize it's been years, but I do wish you "take up your pen" again. Cheers!
It would be amazing to see things from Mark's P.O.V. Wonder where you disappeared to...
weirdly written.. kind of lazy third person. skips times and almost reads like point form sentences.
To the previous commenter: this is absolutely written in first person with a nonomnicient narrator.
The voyage of change is do well done. He's not very self aware but he tells us of his troubled spirit. Wonderful. I think he is more surprised by the end than we are.
I absolutely loved this. If there's anything I must complain about, is that the story is too short.
I loved the two main characters - Matt and Mark - and although I could see they would end up together, I loved reading about the development of their relationship. I felt the pain that gripped Matt's heart when he was so coldly rejected - You're not my type. I felt like hugging him. His friends were sometimes clueless about his feelings. Matt was more than he appeared to be; he fiercely needed to be loved and it was Mark that saw that. This is an amazing story. Please give us more.
Thank you for sharing your gift with us, this is one of the best stories I have ever read,
Thank you
I'll never get tired of this story and I keep finding myself reading it and finding it just as awesome as I did the first time.
It is soo good ! OMG, Matt is such a needy, loving, sensitive guy ! I was near to tears most of the time - he was soo lovable and had such a huge heart - taking a child to his heart, and helping to take care of him, helping a homeless guy ... so much about Matt you'd never expect!
His behaviour at the club could be taken for that of a slut, but he was really trying to get attention and looking for love. I love Matt to bits, and just feel like hugging him.
Thank you for this story. I CAN'T UNDERSTAND WHY YOU WON'T KEEP ON WRITING !!!
Definitely one of the very best stories on this site - always worth another read.
I don't know how many times I have read this story, but I love it. Something about the love stories get me. I don't really like the ones that are sex for sex's sake.
please ,please , add more to this story...the best story on this site by far.....thank you