by firstkiss
The way this story has developed is good. keep writing, you've got the magic touch!
Great story! I was completely absorbed by it. And being from the Island, you completely described any number of farmers (and farm wives) I've known in my life - love the characters.
Another amazing chapter. I just love how you add the family into the story. Can I whine and complain that there was no sex in the story :(
The whole scene at the house was so readable and so realistic that I didn't even feel badly that there was no sex in this chapter. I love reading erotica with context. Keep up the great writing!
Dunno if I commented on the other site, but definitely will here. I am loving Lily and Adam, the chemistry between them is amazing and I look forward to more! Keep up the great writing!
Excuse me ladies and gentlemen, please stand to the side. That includes you Mills & Boon. Please clear the red carpet for one of the great writers of our time .... FIRSTKISS.
Brilliant..... Brilliant.... Brilliant.....
I NEVER laugh out loud while reading, but you made me laugh multiple times with this latest chapter. I adore these characters and since I've just returned from a recent island vacation, I can perfectly picture all the landscapes you've described. I dearly hope to see more wonderful stories from you! Thanks so much for your time and effort!
I'm so very sad to say, that I've not the wit and intellect to sufficiently praise your amazing work.
This is a fun and interesting story. The interplay of the family is great. An enjoyable little journey you're taking us on.
That part of Lilly's life must be your life; surely you work in the publishing business - an editor, perhaps? This writing just "glows"! The use of language, of phrase, the warmth and gracefull flow of the plot line place you head and shoulders above all but three or four other writers on this site, and each of them can look up to you for the manner in which you produce a continually gripping story. Please, grace us with more of your gift and not by just finishing "Not My Type".
And, by the way, do I recognize a "Vargas Girl" in the picture contained in your biographical site?
Thank you for all your wonderful stories! Looking forward to all your new stories! I always start opening the treasure box of "firstkiss'" before I read anything else in Literotica! May be there are new diamonds! Keep on the good work!
I cannot begin to give you the praise you deserve. You are the BEST author on this site, and I always check for updates from you first. I never comment on other stories, but I feel you deserve it. This is TRUE erotica. Thanks for the lovely work, and be sure to keep at it! I know I'm not the only one dying for your latest installments on ALL your series. :)
i have so much fun reading this series. awesome. cant wait for the next chapter.
I knew the first time I read one of your stories that you were talented. You keep proving me right, something I like, so thank you. Keep it up.
I am absolutely in love with this story! I can't wait for the next chapter! From the way you describe Adam, he's like Mr. Perfect! Every woman's dream. Hot and good with his hands (in more ways than 1). LOL Keep 'em coming!
okay so u caused me to stay up WAY to late reading the series....Hope I don't fall asleep during my meeting tomorrow morning. Keep going PLEASE LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!!
I've been reading this since just the first chapter was posted, and I loved it. My boyfriend has been in Vietnam for the past few weeks, and will be there for awhile on an internship, and cannot access any erotic sites from his internet connections. This is one of the few stories I've been sending him through e-mail, and he's thoroughly enjoyed it too. I can't wait to see the next chapter - so I can read it, and send it along to him, too!
wow, this is honestly an amazing story. I would love to be with Adam. I've read Writer's Block as well and I'm completely hooked. your writing is much better than some of the other submissions I've read. I feel like this could actually be a published story. this story incredibly enjoyable and I'm excited to read more. I hope you update this story as well as Writer's Block very soon because I'm dying to read more. :D
Much more "real" than most submissions---and consequently, more enjoyable.
Alright, fine, you've won me over. I will grudgingly admit that I like it and I have to keep reading. I particularly liked the line several chapters ago about Adam having "an unholy weakness for redheads".
Wonderful. The characters are revealed so well through your skills. Sadly too often I read inappropriate descriptions trying to depict some person or thing. You do what I treasure in a story, reveal by showing, not telling, and you do it very well.
This cnapter must have been especially hard to plan out and execute. You did a great job of bringing in Adam's occuption, the motorcycle, the two brothers with their interest in things mechanical, the ancestral home, and the family. To do all of that in so few paragraphs is no mean accomplishment, and you made it all seem so smooth, so natural, that most readers wouldn't even give it a thought. Nice work!
I think I was smiling the entire time! What a lovely story and cast of characters.
well done. It's so great to read a story based in the great white north! and it's about my city( toronto) and my university too>
You are a wonderfully talented writer...AND
you've done the work to develop your CRAFT!!!
I'm hooked. Reel me in!
Liked this chapter best so far (this is the third story of yours I'm reading).
This is a great story that has really drawn me in. Love the characters and I'm sure there's much more to come.
Nice development, unusually realistic tracking of the plot and characters... a really good read.
J
Very very good,
you definitely have a gift for expressing what needs be to make words into a well written and enjoyable story.
Thank you.
Just a brilliant story. Wonderful family, but an incredibly talented writer, story-teller to put it all together. Ever since I first saw this story { have been itching to live more of it - you can't do any better than this..
Wow, they might as well head to the Wedding Chapel now that Lily’s Dad has given his approval! ;-)