All Comments on 'Paying The Price'

I know that you tried to write a good story but...it has to be believable...All the wife had to say was that Ralph was raping her and that Clyde came in and rescued her and then got nmad at her for inviting him in the first place...Simple see...that's reality

Nice to see a story about a guy behaving in a somewhat normal manner instead of pretending, collecting evidence, hatching some crazy scheme, or deciding he gets off on it. Im not a big fan of lost years but you didnt go overboard on his time in jail so it wasnt bad. Still allowed for a happy ending even with his jail time since their marriage was better and they were better of financially.

I dont mind the husbands sneaking around playing PI either but this was a nice change of pace from the overly intellectual husbands we usually see in these stories.

Thanks for writing.

That one commenter was all wet. Ralph wasn't raping her and she did invite him in. She ended up telling the truth. Clyde went over board but shit happens. Who could blame him? Like he said. He 'Paid the price'. Always a good read from you DG.

An avid fan

good story and nicely written. good job, as always.

One of the best on here.. All the wimpe out there need to take notice. You fuck up and some guy will take your place... I belive this story should be a winner.. Thank DG for puting my life in to words.. Thanks Gary badass2at prodigydotnet

DG,

I told you I don't care much for this catasgory, but this one is just right. No wimp, just a proper reaction and result. In quite a few states he would have gotten away with it, to bad they lived in the wrong one.

A shame Clyde had to pay for such a piece of shit like Ralph, but, mistakes were made. And Ralph was invited in and she wasn't resisting him. Laws vary so much from state. But it is an excellent story!

A guy whose testicles were surgically removed is not likely to be trying to seduce anyone afterwards. Castration brings about hormonal changes that normally interfere with such behavior.

he was goig to fuck his wife? Ralph was probably lucky he was shot rather than be around when Clyde was released. AS I understand it, castration means you can't have children; NOT that you can't get it up and get it in.

Good story about an honest, forthright, loving man, and wife.

The only thing I can say is this is a fantastic Loving Wives story. It hits on all cylinders and was a true joy to read. It just made so much sense and still had a bit of mystery to take it over the top

Another great DG story

Thank you so much

PT

What can I say? Yet another super DG story. All I can say is this is truly a fantastic Loving Wives story and not at all like the general run of LW tales. The plot and characterisation puts it into the 'masterpiece' class and you, DG, into the master author class. Well done! Pete.

Sorry I couldn't stomach enough of this garbage to read past him walking in on her. The intro at least let me know where you were coming from. For the "manly man" in you, that needs vindication by being a macho jerk, I hope you feel better now.

An urban legend! They both had a lot of attitude and temper and they both felt very real! Congratulations! Plus you added to the story a flavor of a modern western –turning CLYDE (a coincidence –I wonder?) into an urban legend of our times Cheers! To good stories convincing reconciliations and of course high testosterone!

It takes so little to become an urban legend?

"I know I sound like a prick" was perhaps the most realistic sentence in the whole story.

I can smell the testosterone from here!

This was a well written tale with good characterization.

Good job, as usual.

Regards, DJ

wow this is one awful contrived story...

I can hardly believe its from DG Hear one of the best writers here. Jesus ths story sucks shit on toast.

where to begin? Again we have a wife that accuses the hubby of cheating... accused him repeatedly... goes out of her way to protecet the OTHER guy... the guy that ends up almost raping her...

Frankly its very sad that such a thing did NOT happen to the whore wife

The other guy is stripping off her clothles and panties and she NEVER says NO...

CONSIDER

After the Husband beats up the other guy at the point of the attempted rape the wife has weeks maybe MONTHS to think about what she did... how awful her actions were... how damaging what she did WAS to the marriage....

so how does she try and fix it?. BY making sure her own hubby goes to Jail for 4 years with her false testimony...

"Oh I love you so.... boo hoo Boo hooo...."

why would any man want to reconcile with this vile nasty twisted bitch?

The Hubby did NOT do a fucking thing wrong -- talaing to a woman and saying no thank you I am not interested is the COrRECT thing to so...

you get 4yrs,come on that over the top.to much drama can kill a story.

what the Hell is wrong with you people? I dont agree with Harry very often but this story has a wife that is either the greatest Liar of all time of the stupidest person of all time

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Consider her testimony

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<i>He started undoing the buttons on my blouse and pulled my bra over my breasts. I didn't know what I was doing. I didn't want this man. I wanted my Clyde, but I sat there and let him touch me </i>

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then she says to Clyde in jail

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<i>know you might not believe me but, I don't think </i> (I guess she wasn't certain) <i> I would have gone any further than I did. I felt so guilty. I was almost glad to see you come in. </i>

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So we have a wife

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BUT would not give him a chance to defend himself while she supposedly really loves Clyde <br></br>

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but some how gosh darn her Boobs came and her tits were getting sucked .... but she really No idea how that happened

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<b> This other guy is stripping off her clothes and panties and by her own testimony in court and her words to Clyde she NEVER said NO .... she never said STOP </b>.

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Yeah I want to be

Your stories are always well witten, but when you make your hero act like an ass-hole and his wife act like a naive dummy it's hard to have much sympathy for either of them. Clyde I think is probably dumber than his wife,who has to get a job because of a tight budget.While wifey is working o make ends meet, dummy is blowing money at the local bar after having wasted a pile on a brand new TV that apparently sits at home. Whether he's cheating or not if they're short of cash dummy buying drinks for himself and the girls at the local bar doesn't do much for the budget.

60 year old George

like to say that you have put all the wimp husbands in their place properly and you even explained it so even an idiot can understand...marriedwithballs@yahoo.com

what a load of JUNK!!! GUYS DONT READ THIS!!!! IT is a waste of time! if you are the kind of person who reads the comments first to see how good the story is........ TURN BACK NOW. DONT READ THIS CRAP.

You're getting worst with you're stories not even close to believeable no two people are that dumb outside of yourself of course.

This is a excellent story. It's so good that you did't have to put sex in it. That made it even better. Do'nt worry about the ones who did'nt like it. They were looking for pictures. (smile)

The characters were real and the writing was excellent. A fast moving story with a lot of believable action. Thanks .........Rich

This is the way to handle a cheating wife and her lover,not like those sissy wimp ass fools who like being shit on!

She kind of got away with it but the seducer got his "due".

Well done!

...for people to have a hard time lying on the stand.So the people were stupid.That doesn't detract from the story one bit.Makes it more believable.

I think the message old Clyde sent out, by his actions with Ralph, made it clear that you don't mess around with Clyde or his missus. I thought it was one of your better stories. Thanks for all your work on behalf of this site.

Did I miss the part where Ralph grew a new set of balls? Because if he didn't, then trying to have intercourse with any woman would be a miracle in the order of the immaculate conception. Although I believe the mentality of Clyde's character certainly points to hit first and grunt later. The author needs to be a little more cerebral, and do the thinking before posting an incomplete story.

When I read Ralph lost his balls, I was thinking he couldn't get it up anymore. I completely forgot about it by the time I read he was coming onto Sue, and only realised there was probably something wrong when I read Mandy's comment. A lack of testosterone leads to feminisation of a man. I'm not sure how he could have sex.. but he could get hormone replacement or he could take it up the ass! ;) It's not too far-fetched for Ralph to ask a doctor about he could get an erection with no balls, and being prescribed steroids.

The creepy rapist from Sin City who turned yellow as a side-effect of regrowing his genitals.

I liked this one better then Laws of the Heart.

It still seemed a bit stilted in the dialouge, but worlds better.

What I valued most is the realistic details. He beats the hell out of a guy, he goes to jail. She gets pumped full of jism, and she is cupping her vagina so it doesn't just drip on the floor. Obviously most of the other writers seem to think that women LOVE to have sperm dripping down their thighs and all over the floor so everyone knows what they're doing, even if they don't have to clean the floor. Most women aren't like that AFAIK.

However...the guy keeps going on and on about communication, tediously so, but once he gets out, he NEVER asks his wife if she shot the bastard. Great communication skills dude. (flips thumb up) One would think he would at least obliquely address the issue since it was what made him finally forgive her, at least as far as I see it in the story.

After all, nothing says true love like homicide. (Just kidding)

There probably are many evil people like Clyde. However, even though I like that this story is different, I don't care to read about stupid and violent husbands.

Certainly he is stupid for talking to the police. It doesn't matter if you are innocent or not, other then, providing name, SSN, and address, the rule is never talk to the police and there is no such thing as "Off the record."

Because it is not a story I like, I have it a lower rating. Without the violence, I would have rated it 5 stars.

it amazes me that a judgemental asshole like dwornock would say this a violent story. Please Clyde handled his business. Your telling me you would just walk away with your tale tucked, like a little bitch. Clyde is the man.

no complaints...

you have to dig for her IQ

Although the violence was a little over the top, and based on what he heard when he walked in, was over the top with his wife as well, I still like a guy with guts. I think one, well placed, short right cross to the jaw whould have sufficed...well, maybe a couple to the ribs as well. :-)

Good story.

Not a stretch - the ground work was clearly laid - but we were never sure about it - especially with the wig he found in her drawer.

Well executed -

Sometimes, virtue has its rewards, as well as being its own reward.

are worlds apart. TK U MLJ LV NV

Clyde handle things very well. A little ass kicking goes a long way!!!! Thanks for sharing.

You take care of business, pay the price, and then resume living.

And then you woke up.

HA

the only thing i don't agree with is getting back with her.

she made the effort, gave the attention to another man, and called him over and started to get naked. She didn't file assault, rape, or harassment against the guy so she has no leg to stand on.

You took a good man and made him a wimp in the end personally.

So-so story. He may have jumped some guy from behind, and kicked 7 shades of shit out of him, but he is still a wimp. Anyone that takes a cheater back is a loser and a wimp. Circumstances and intentions don't matter when the deed is done. We all have choices in this life, and when you decide to cheat, it doesn't matter why or how far you went, you're a fucking cheater. Anyone so mentally weak, and emotionally dependant that they would rather stay married at any cost, even to a cheater, than spend any amount of time alone is a wimp!

So we have the usual wife that will believe anything said about her husband, won't believe a word He says, and takes any opportunity to get sex on the side. How did Brad end up at the house while hubby was away? SHE invited him, thats how! And not for a cup of coffee either. She didn't know what was happening? Is she brain dead? Walk up to ANY woman, open her blouse and feel up her tits, I dare you. See what happens! And then SHE convicts her own husband. A wife CANNOT legally be forced to testify against her own husband under ANY circumstances, unless she decides that she wants to do it. The lawyer would have told her this, as he is legally required to, yet she still decided to do it. Why?, if for no other reason than to ensure conviction. And then it takes her MONTHS to visit the man she claims to love? Was she busy stock-taking at the store?Hers is the kind of love you don't need!

I agree with the previous comment, He IS a fucking wimp for taking her back! She disrespects him for months, treats him like shit, accused him of cheating when he wasn't, cheats herself for no other reason than he was out of the house, Intentionally gets him sent to jail, and he STILL takes her back, because she is good in bed? Horse shit. Being able to beat up someone physically, doesn't mean you are not a wimp. Saying that "I am not a wimp",doesn't make it so. Staying with someone that cheats on you, out of fear of being alone, makes you a wimp, no matter how big you are.

While the wife was a stupid bitch for falling for Ralph's BS, (not Brad) probably the only reason she thought Clyde might looking for some strange is because she was severely limiting access to her pussy so even if he was it was partially her fault. A lot of what happens in stories on this site don't happen at all like they are written about, but women trying to control men with rationing sex is fairly common, and is extremely destructive to marriages. My guess is as much as 1/3 of divorces are caused by such mind games. Even if the man doesn't look elsewhere it erodes closeness and trust. Obviously both parties are grouchier while sexually frustrated. The residual effect of continual rejection effects the man's mental wellbeing. One or both parties are likely to limit physical affection, because while its true most men don't crave cuddling the same way women do they will likely avoid it more strenuously when getting worked up will only end in frustration, the diminished playful flirting results in more emotional distance. I know my wife's (now ex-wife) frigidity sapped the cheerfulness out of my personality.

I used to joke that when my wife (ex-wife) would remove her jeans to change for bed the furnace would kick in. Other jokes I would tell were she needed a defroster for her panty liners and that she thought oral sex was talking about it, and she wanted no part of that either.

I actually thought reconciliation was acceptable in this case despite what krosis666 and ANON 6/24/14 state. Some people are either so jaded or insecure in their manhood they see wimps and cucks where there are none. I hate cuck stories and think they should have their own category so real men don't have to inadvertently read them, but limp wristed commenters who call any male character who doesn't maim or murder every adulterous pair are just as sickening. People do sometimes just make a mistake, and people do really change. Its about being real, being able forgive and ultimately whether trust can be re-established.

Overall a well written and enjoyable read.

Clyde should have said that he heard Mandy say no telling Ralph to stop, then Ralph continuing was sexual assault and Clyde was defending her = no charges.

She backs the story or divorce.

After the legalities from the defense were taken care of would be the time to put her to the curb or at the least get her to understand that if the way she is toward him does not change then it will happen.

Liked the way the story was developed and that it wasn't dragged out. ~ Mandy was largely at fault for the negative drama that unfolded.First,she just took Ralph's word that Clyde was tooting the bimbo at the bar,and secondly,she was playing head games with her husband by denying him sex as punishment when he did't behave the way she wanted. That had to cause some anger and a whole lot of resentment on his part. Control,withholding sex,anger,and resentment are all major contributors in fostering a relationship that had them drifting further and further apart and leading to a total lack of communication. ~ It was good to see their renewed love,commitment,and yes,much more "hiding the salami" after Clyde got sprung. An unusual "happy ending" for these kind of stories. ~ Kudos to the author for a story well done!

I have read a lot of your stories and I haven't been disappointed yet. this particular story I have read twice ( second by accident ) and this story is so great because it shows what a real man would do in a case like this. good story, good job just like your other stories that I have read keep up the great job and thank you got writing a story about a real man.

Why would it be illegal to own a Luger with a firing pin in it? How did they know it was a Luger that shot Ralph? It could have been any 9mm pistol, and that probably covers about 75% of all pistols (which shoot "9mm Luger" rounds).

You can identify the caliber, .22, .45, 9mm, etc. but not the manufacturer of the weapon.

Maybe removing the serial number is what is illegal.

But removing the firing pin would not make it legal again if that is the case.

Relacement firing pins are readily available to return it to working order.

Different manufacturers use different rifling, for example Colt rifling turns in the opposite direction of Smith and Wesson rifling.

Some of the lugers came with both a fully auto setting and a semi - auto setting.of course, the fully auto would be illegal unless, you had a class 3 firearms license.

Ralph's balls had been removed. How could he finish the job? With a dildo?

I fucked your skank ass mom. And your daddy cleaned ua both up. He loves his job as creampie eater

It's the filed-off serial number, NOT the firing pin. The Feds, pursuant to the above provisions of Federal Law, say either hubby or wife are looking at up to 5 years in a Federal Penitentiary. Most states also criminalize filed off serial numbers. Both the Feds AND the state could criminally prosecute, and after he did 5 years in a Federal slammer, he could start several years in a state prison. ( Not Double Jeopardy, there are two different Sovereigns, and each COULD prosecute!) Hubby is a small fish for the Feds, but the locals may have a grudge against hubby. Why else would they be there when they went to the storage locker? So hubby may be back in the slammer for several more years.

That being said, hubby was a Neanderthal asshole, who deserved everything he got, and much more! Ralph should have sued him for the loss of his balls. The VA pays $200.00 for life for any guy who losses his cock or balls, so that's a starting point for Ralph to sue the hubby.

To the commenter who said you don't get four years for assault and battery, that's probably true. But If the prosecutor charged the crime (in Minnesota, for example) as first degree assault (MN Stat. Section 609.221, "whoever assaults another in inflicts great bodily harm, it may be sentenced to imprisonment for not more than twenty years"), then four years is not at all unlikely! I think most males would feel having your testicles kicked so badly they had to be removed, would constitute a great bodily harm!

Wife should have divorced this abusive asshole!

-Old (male) JAG.

Yes the gun is illegal but being unworkable the locals would have not made a big deal about it unless they had a hard on about something else. Concerning Clyde, he did exactly what he should have done with the asshole. The only hole in the plot was is that his wife should have told the police that she told the guy no and that kept pressuring her and was undressing her against her will. Assault with intent to rape would have been a decent bargaining chip to drop the assault charge against her husband. All in all, a good story. No wimps, no cuckolds, no cream lickers. The only bad thing were some of the wimp-assd, pacifist, cum licking commenters. You know who you are. A big 5* just to piss you off.

on the wrong person. TK U MLJ LV NV

It seems many people paid the price here. The wife lost her husband. The kids lost their father, who went to jail. However, the one who lost the most was the jerkoff wannabe lover. He lost his balls then his life. And the rest lived happily ever after. Oh, the black widow went to jail for killing cheaters. At least she did the world a favor.

Yeah

Just imagine how much better off the world would be with less women who indefinitely cut the man off from sex for dumb ass reasons. Not having sex with your partner makes nothing better. Certainly doesn't improve communication. CA49

1: When the protagonist is on trial for assaulting Ralph, you wrote that Ralph's testicles had been removed--which would make him impotent. But when you wrote about Ralph visiting the protagonist in prison, you have Ralph bragging that he was going to "fuck" Mandy. How would Ralph accomplish that when he would no longer be able to perform.

2: You write that the police discovered Sue was Ralph's murderer when they were following up on a cheating spouse case. Adultery is not a criminal offense and there would be no cause for police to be following a cheating spouse simply because he was suspected of cheating.

Didn't he lose his nuts! So said his lawyer! No nuts no fucks! Maybe I am wrong what would I know BYE

A BIG 5+,and a very special shout-out for the following pearls of wisdom from this story! :

"Now, please understand that I'm not knocking any writers or authors. I'm knocking these stupid fucking wimps that are boyfriends and husbands. They watch their wives getting fucked and they feel bad. They are in a mind boggling situation on what to do, so they slowly back out of the room and sneak back out of their own home and go to the bar to give it some more thought while they drink a pint of Jim Beam. Later they go home and act as though nothing has happened and then later try and plan some type of revenge. Is this what real men do?

I say, "Bullshit to you cuckolding wimp sons of a bitches. You candy ass motherfuckers who let other men use your wife and stand back and watch. You don't want to mess up your nice little marriage and maybe have to face reality. In some cases you actually stand there and jack-off while watching your so-called lover get plowed."

Let me leave aside that the Universe does not give a shit about justice or the rightness of one's cause. If the other guy is larger, the Universe (and perhaps the WIFE) might smile happily as the OTHER guy administers a beating on YOU instead. Some guys are bigger than other. Some guys are more skilled than others. Some guys are more legally powerful than others.

But I don't want to talk about that because it is obvious to even a room temperature intellect.

Instead, what exactly do I write? "A guy opens the door to his bedroom and finds his wife in bed with someone, beats the shit out of him and..."

What exactly do I write as a follow up? Unless I write adolescent clap trap, it will either involve shallow graves, police, or changing one's name and living in Juarez for the rest of your life. Maybe all three.

Is that REALLY the story you want the author to tell? How many stories like that can you read...all...of...them...exactly...the...same...?

So yes, it is a contrivance and offends your sense of justice, but there is a REASON writers write this. It makes for longer stories. (Though granted, Thomas Harris wrote a hell of a follow up in Black Sunday to a wife's infidelity. Granted, in that story too, the wronged husband got the shit beaten out of him)

So...maybe a bit of generosity of spirit and suspension of disbelief is in order for you to like these stories a little better.

straight, strong man, if you are a man you have to do what this man did.

You go, Mandy!

Just a little much!!!

All Mandy had to say was that Ralph was raping her! It's her and Clyde's word against Ralph. Ralph would be going to jail instead of Clyde. That is a better ending than killing Ralph

There's always those few seconds of fright and indecision before you ready up a lie. Those will give away such foolish plan as to say you're betting raped when your husband shows up unexpectedly. It's also about as respectable as physically harming yourself to get revenge, perverting the justice system.

To cheat is unjust. To abuse a system meant to bring things more in balance is an injustice to society at large. Perjury should have death penalty.

I enjoyed the story. It’s well written and the story is told without obvious spoilers.

But WTF is with the wig in Mandy’s dresser? Worn it once? When, and why? For all the talk about fixing communication (which I WISH my wife would commit to), why wouldn’t Clyde ask about the damned wig? The way the story began about not being a wimp, and how Clyde trusted her during prison and after, there’s no way he wouldn’t ask about the wig... if not before the Police took the Luger, then immediately after. When Mandy said she hadn’t killed Ralph, Clyde’s first thought should have been: ‘what about the wig?’

Some doubted whether a man without testicles is able to have sex. Short response is yes he can. I personally know of someone who survived testicular cancer. He had the boys removed, along with the prostate, and a good portion of his intestines.

He's able to perform, but sadly not able to have a happy ending. (no parts to create semen).

So assuming Ralph still had the rest of the male parts could be able to perform and climax. He just wouldn't have any swimmers.

If the guy was one inch smarter he could have convinced wife to claim rape and there would be no jail for him. Yes, I prefer to be violent as well but you also need to have some brain, it helps.

Why would he get four years jail,when his wife said the sex was non consenting,the maximum should have been four months and he already served two on remand.

I don't think he would have gotten 4 years for this circumstance especially with no priors, But anyway that is what real men do they protect what's theirs. I agree with the first few lines of the story where wimps back out of their own home and pretend like nothing happened because they need more proof. I agree with the author do what you have to your home and everything in it is your sanctuary protect it.

Ralph go beaten, then shot. Definitely deserved it. Clyde shouldn't have done four years, but it ended well for everyone except Ralph. Like the black widow touch.

until they went to get the furniture out of storage before searching for the luger? They wouldn't! Too many exaggerations in this story! Gave it a 2.

This was a great, short pounding story, nice.

Most of your stories are good but you blew this one out you ass. Assault and batter is a misdemeanor in all states the maximum sentence in a misdemeanor is one year in County jail. Many have a 90 day max. The right charge could have been aggravated assault. With no prior you get county time or even just probation. Four year is just ludicrous.

I agree with a prior poster.. first offense, no weapon, no drugs, in his own home, a guy who forced himself uninvited on his wife who did not give consent, well- the guy he beat up was more likely to go to jail. In fact it is 2 against 1 on witnesses, I dont think it would be possible for him to be convicted except in fantasy land.

Great story

Sue's real name was Aileen wuornos

Yep a cheating whore so 1 star for this story. There are no excuses. There must be absolute proof before moving on EVERYTIME!!! not a stupid feeling...

Out of line with the circumstances (first offense, no weapon, no premeditation, no drugs, extenuating circumstances) but I looked at sentencing guidelines for my state, Arizona, and the time they give for simple assault and battery is just fucking barbaric. I just love Clyde's reaction to all this though. None of that sneaking out of his own home while the wife fucks someone else. Nope deal with the assholes immediately and decisively. You should never have a doubt about where a man stands on a cheating slut debate. Mandy having no faith in Clyde, believing someone else above her own husband might even be sufficient to warrant divorce.

DG does good stories about killer women. This is a good one. Lot of Lugers floating around though, wish I could find one.

The asshole had his testicles removed, but he threatened to have sex with the guy's wife? Oh, look! My balls are back. It's a miracle!

It was a good story, but perhaps not fully thought through.

Stupid! Goes back to the cheating wife that basically got him prison time? 1 star...

Just another pathetic RAAC story!

She had her guts out and was going to cheat. That's the whole point of the story. So, in the end, Clyde is a wimpy cuck and she'll do it again!

How did they know it was a Luger that shot Ralph? Most were 9mm as are hundreds of other pistols. It’s the most common round in the world, but these super-cops could identify the make/model of the gun used? Amazing!

Ugh - what a couple of morons.

I agree what Man wants to watch his wife screw another Man .. I am not wired that way You could ask My wives first ex lover but He moved to another State . I was a Short outside linebacker on the College team . I had Good Speed but at 5' 10" tall you have to earn the other teams respect

What a stupid ending.

I liked the story and the ending. Gets my 5 star vote

ZEROZEROZERO.

TOTAL BULLSHIT. Prison visitors must on an approved list, and requested by the prisoner. No one, NO ONE just waltzes in and sits down with the prisoner. YOU live in a fantasy world.

2* for plot holes. A lot of guns fire 9mm, not just Luger. Wife cannot be forced to testify against husband. The wife says she loves husband, but let's a predator into her house and disrobes him and her selves.

'I say, "Bullshit to you cuckolding wimp sons of a bitches. You candy ass motherfuckers who let other men use your wife and stand back and watch. You don't want to mess up your nice little marriage and maybe have to face reality. In some cases you actually stand there and jack-off while watching your so-called lover get plowed.'

Hear! Hear!! Well said. Can't read any more of 'em. It may work as a device to spin a story, but the story immediately becomes unreal.

LWlurker

Not one of your better efforts but that said I like almost everything you've done

What the hell you can't win and destroy whatever readers so I'm not already keep writing you're great.

You managed to make even the prick guy more likable than your protagonist.

Another great story with a twist I am now into the Ns Keep up the good work (jaybee186)

High quality story, nice plot twist.