by Ashson
That means very good. Ashon's narrators' are usually huge on propriety and droll humor, but not so much in virtue. Full marks. *****
Funny and hot! The brother changes from Brian, to Bruce, and back again, though. Oops.
I know this is Non-Consent, but I still don't want to read twee lines such as "Why is a lady as charming as yourself all alone on this great big beach? It's a waste of natural resources to have you hidden away here", which imply that it is neutral or complimentary to talk to a woman as though she is a resource to be exploited, she has some sort of duty to let herself be admired by people and it is unprompted rudeness of her to respond to such a comment with hostility.
Comical but with some added spice. Nice. Glad I decided to go for a quick read. Barbra and mc'a intersection had me feeling blessed. Great job you did here man
What happened to Brian? Where did this Bruce guy come from? And then suddenly Bruce is gone and Brian's back. Say what?