All Comments on 'Sarah's Story Ch. 01-03'

Love your stories. Never know what to expect. Here you are writing from the female gender. Can't wait to see where this ones is going.

An avid reader of DG Hear

Very interesting, not at all predictable. I look forward to see where you take the story!

Thanks, ohio

Please don't make us wait to long for the next part. I enjoyed this story.

Very good start DG and I am looking forward to the next chapters. You are again writing in a woman’s point of view and I look forward to some of the female commentator’s analysis. I sure hope Literotica keeps them coming in succeeding days as you expect. Thank you for this entertainment and all the wonderful efforts you always give.<p>PT

DG i loved how Sarah told Leonard where to go and what he could do with his life he was a real bastrd i hope to read more of the is story i love it.

Pat

its a nice change to see the Husband being the self centered asshole but this part is...just...well UNBELIEVEABLE...

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<i>"You son of a bitch. I'm getting a divorce and I never want to see you again. <B>I can't believe that I married a man who didn't even want his child. </B>You go back to your big empty house and look and sit around and stare at all the pictures of your dead wife. We could have had a good life and a family but all you could think about is yourself. I want nothing more to do with you. Please leave my room </i>

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Frnakly I cant believe HER! Given what we KNOW about this woman... street smart educated wise finanical person who marries a guy 15 or 20 years OLDER... yet they NEVER discussed the issue of Children?

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EVER????

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Nah.... that is Just too hard to believe

I've liked all your stories, but if this one keeps going the way it has started it will, in my opinion, be your best one.

got nailed in high school; got raped in college; married a man who did not want children (duh, the dude's 47 and already had grown children: Sarah's a stupid little hick who had just graduated from college!); divorced him because of nothing else but that he simply didn't want another kid. <p>

Date another man and he pimped her out to get a promotion and got it, so he cries big tears, but promises to make it up to her. She cries and tells us how badly she feels and how these men --- lovers and foes alike --- are fucking her silly. <p>

WTF! Is there ANY POINT to this silly Sarah saga; when does woman learn; when does an author learn, that a story is too stupid and perhaps it ought not be written?

perhaps your best to date - lead on.<P>

With High Regard

Sarah is pretty adamant about wanting her baby, huh? I can understand an old man not wanting more kids, though. Well, maybe Sarah can find what she really needs--A younger man that wants kids. Very good writing.

The story's pacing is a bit slow, and the plot isn't tightly focused, being more a rambling narration of Sarah's life. The hook didn't grab my attention, and the narrative drive of this chapter is weak.

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Sarah's surprise pregnancy demonstrates a basic fault in her marriage. Neither partner really puts the other first. The accidental death of the fetus precipitated the divorce but a break-up was likely to happen in any case. I agree with Harry: it's hard to believe that, despite their differences, that Sarah and Leonard had never discussed having children, particularly since she is in her prime child-bearing years.

have talked about kids. Both of them were very motivated about having kids ... just unfortunately from differing perspectives. He was kind of cold about it.

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Interesting story with good detail.

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Regards, Jack

the story,but just one very minor point to mention.When Leonard first met her his surname was Nelson,but after they were married she says she is Mrs Leonard White,did he change his name?

Very well written. Odd that they wouldn't have discussed kids prior to marrying, given his age.

We are shaped by and own the way it makes us live and defines our needs -

She has the strength to move where she needs to so she can live her own life.

good. Story puts you inside her head and feelings. Well done.

Very good writing and has certainly captured my interest and earned my emotional investment in your character.

Full marks.

Not my usual typestory, but I really enjoyed it. DG can tell a good story about anything

Not sure if it is Sarah’s unpredictable childhood or just the author, but this reads a lot like a documentary. As Jack Webb said, ‘Just the facts, Ma’am!’

4*

There should have been a tag so a reader was warned about the rape.

I takes a lot of quality, finesse and expertise for a male author to step into the skin of a woman (probably with a few wiggles) and write a story as if he were that woman. My hat to DGH.

Leonard sure was a despicable piece of work and crapola!. In Sarah's shoes, I would work hard to get rid of his investment account ASAP. 5* Let's see what the continuation holds for us.

BJ

Leonard should have been charged. He speed up on a rainy night which lead to the death of his unborn son. Bad ma for sure