by Flynhghr
this story has a lot of potential and I see you have some ability as a writer though you need to work on building your story and your charaters which could be done n sequels of this story
love n/c and sitter stories and this one nicely combined the two. well done.
Got about 2 minutes in and bailed. The poor grammar and writing was so distracting, I just wasn't enjoying the story at all.