All Comments on 'The Escapee Ch. 03-04'

use a coma rather than a period when a sentence is not done ---- e.g: "John, please, come her," I heard my mother said ---- and your already very good story would be at least 50 percent better. <p>

Why do you keep writing: <p>

"John, come here." my mother said?, <p>

when it is obvious that you yourself KNOW that that is ONE COMPLETE SENTENCE (not two)? You don't even capitlize the "m" in the word "my", so YOU KNOW, it is just one sentence, no? A COMA --- not a peroid --- needs to go between the words HERE & MY!

Sorry I missed this when it posted. A really good story with a few twists to kep me jumping. The declaration of love at dinner was perfect, most of us guys have done as bad or worse. Have fun and keep them coming.

I don't remember what happens, I'm worried about the description later about an "old flame".

I hope it doesn't mess up him and Donna.

I find it unusual that someone who’s had only one partner is so sexually confident with someone new.