All Comments on 'The Neighbor's Sister'

First story!

4

Average at best......

This would fit better in Erotic Couplings, there is nary a hint of romance or emotional connection here

I think it was more of Erotic Couplings than Romance, but an enjoyable story.

Good attempt to frame the situation. Neighbor is a slut marrying a cuck. For guys like me the question is "why get married if you want to live like a single person, fucking anything that moves?" Weak, pointless filler leading into I don't know what as that premise lost the thread for me and I couldn't continue reading.

I agree witheearlier comments that Erotic Couplings is the more appropriate enue than Romance, but still zvery enjoyable little story.

Whilst well written, the story has little if any romance, and as things stand, would probably be a better fit in Erotic Couplings. That is of course, unless you intend to continue and introduce a more romantic element.

Ok story, but there's no suggestion of any romance.

You need to find someone to proof read and edit your work. I got about 25% of the way through before the amount of grammatical errors and typographical mistakes made me skip to the end to leave you this comment. I may come back and read your little story again after it has been cleaned up.

Not bad for a first story, but you need to get an editor! Got 4* for the first attempt. I agree it would work better in Erotic Couplings. Were it a part 1 of a series, then maybe in Romance.