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I looked up at my wife, and she was on fire. I stuck out my tongued, and wiggled it.
"Even stop teasing me." She grabbed my head and led me to the promised land. My radar was on, I was locked on target. The countdown was at 5, 4, 3, 2, ....(to be continued)
The End
THERE MUST BE A MISTAKE
CHAPTER 7
by
Prolonged_Debut10
P. S. I thought I was evil because of some of the situations I put my characters in, but with some of the situations you suggested after chapter 6 was posted; I decided I was almost a Saint. One of 'YOU' my dear readers suggested when Gordon grows up he marry one of 'BRADS' girls, just to drive him crazier than Patricia Valentino had already done. If you do not remember who Brad or Patricia is; they were characters in, "HONOR THY MOTHER AND THY FATHER."
To give you a brief hint into their relationship, read the last portion of Chapter 29 of that story. You will begin to understand a little about Brad, and his fear of having baby girls in his life, his love hate relationship with Patti, and a horse named, "Timeless."
P.P.S.S. It is with a heavy heart that I must inform you that my book has been turned down by two publishers. I am waiting to hear from the third. I am expecting that third strike any day now. I am not devastated but it does hurt.
- COMMENTS
Anonymous4 months agoI cannot believe he is condoning an underage person to have sex. So be it. The other thing I have a problem, that is my problem, but I detest, hate, get worked up when a lady has her hair up. My autism kicks off. I have to have a face framed by hair, yes has to be long. I do not recognise a person that has short hair. If they have long hair and it is down, I will instantly recognise them a second time. Thus I do not find it elegant for a lady to have her hair 'up'. I know this will bore a lot to tears.
Delicious does not seem to have that many hang ups but she is being made to be dense. Her mother gave her all those ways of keeping males away from her and now she capitulates so readily. For me that does not equate to her inner self. I feel the author is playing with their readers.
Jipsy6 months agoAlways keep trying. Never give up!! Wonderful work but you do need an editor/proofreader.
Ravey19about 1 year agoI cannot believe your bad luck in having the book turned down. I'm no bookseller but I love your storytelling and the characters you've generated here. The writing is funky at times but I love the interactions you've created. Yes, there are errors which should be picked up but I admit I gloss over them as i concentrate on the story. I'd have to read each chapter twice, once for the context and humour, secondly to pick up the mistakes.
Brilliant. Easily 5 stars.
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis not about this chapter specifically but about the whole story so far.
I start reading late at night when I go to bed and never stop until the break of dawn after so many complaints from my sleeping wife next to me in bed. You can imagine how I feel next day at work. So tired and thinking about going back home to see where this story is going.
It is killing me!
I do not want to see how many chapters are left. But despite what I wrote above, I hope there is still many more.
I think the publishers you've mentioned are so stupid to let you down!
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoMany of my fellow readers(and re-readers like my self) complain about science geeks, nerds, super geniuses, Wealthy to-do's, and there families actually speaking correct ENGLISH and not sounding like our failing education system here in America. The story is good, the characters are strange and extra-large at first but they and all the characters in his other stories grow and change like real people, not just cardboard hero cut outs that never lose, change, or grow.
PD10 explicitly states on each chapter, this is a Novel. Meaning it takes time for all the little details to grow and blow your mind. Patience is a virtue, but its also a way of life.
-Revol
