All Comments on 'This Christmas'

HELL YES we want to hear what is next. You can't take a story this good and just walk away from it without a next chapter.

I loved the story and the characters were just great.

....my only citicism (and not even a big one) would be to get an editor. It makes it a bit awkward to be reading along and see a typo. It sounds like a small thing, but it can totally disrupt a good story.

Looking forward to Chapter Two

If your grammer and spelling had been better I would have scored you 100 . You told the story at the right speed and made it realistic . Do continue but have someone read over it before you submit it .

Great story, but please check your grammar.

You stopped way tooo early.. this story has to be at least 10 chapters...... more.. very good writing.. keep going..

Great story, please write more I can't wait for Ch 2 to see what happens next

I loved it. You need to write more on it though, you can't just get me hooked and then stop. That's not fair. I've book marked your profile waiting for the next installment to this story. I keep checking back every two days hoping for another part to the story. So I hope you'll write one. And continue on. *smiles* Please keep going...

This is a pretty fair start to a potentially good story line. While it is true you need an editor, the content is first rate. Keep going, get an editor, improve as you go. I hope to see the next installment soon. I will proof read and edit it if you would like.

Blake is a self absorbed, thoughtless prick, I hope in future chapters you can show him growing into a human being.

Before you publish a second chapter, please organise a proof reader, I laughed aloud at Blake's assertion that he was a great writer in a story littered with misspellings and bad grammar.

Exellent needs happy ending

you are one fucked up loser you get us hooked and drooling then stop and leave us hanging you should be hung by your balls for not finishing this story

can't wait for number 2

Blake needs to get his head out, i`ll wait for the rest of the story.

Really this needs to continue... like 20 chapters. amazing

2 1/2 yrs later and the last words you wrote were "cause this story ain't done yet" Your character can't commit and neither can you. You all ready have an H rating so I gave you a negative rating

This story was good. What happens next?

This is a very good story with well defined characters. You really need to continue with at least one more sequel.

Now you got me and I need to know what's gonna happen. Will Blake and Shady end up together? Does Brian have a sister of his own that he's doing? Come on!

Wow. what a douche way to end the story. Of course i want to know the rest.

guess what fi=our years and we are still waiting either finish the story or delete it it isn't fair to just leave us hanging. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU START OR DON'T START AT ALL.

When are you going to write the next chapter(s). Seems kind of unfair to leave the reader in the middle of the story.

Total Crap Total CrapT otal Crap Total Crap

I thought it was a pretty good story. I hope it's finished. I would like to read the rest. 5***** toby9790.

Hurry and right the next part i love this story

The only critique I have on the story, you need to use a program like Word Perfect to clean up your writing, some of the words you used did not fit like the use of strait instead straight which should been used. As far as the story itself the ending was the right one.

I thought Blake was fairly realistic. He's dealing with a lot of issues and doesn't quite know how to deal with them. Agree on grammar.

What happens next?!??!?

The build up to the end was fairly good. Then just throws it all away. Doesn't think about the family and what has happened to his father, it's all about him. Society and the stigma of incest has corrupted our minds. Besides this story needed the 2nd chapter but didn't get delivered.

finish your story, you never leave everyone hanging. you should do a couple more chapters and you'll know what you have to say.

You started a great story in 2007 and it is 2015 and you have yet to finish it. Why would you release a story that is only half a story????? That sucks!

This story has my heart pounding wanting more ! Please write more !?!

I'd love to read more of this I really wanna know if Blake and Shady finally get and stay together forever please let me know what happens

I want to know if shady and Blake get together and what happens with there dad.

this story was written 10 years ago and was never finished

Wish I knew why authors in here do this to a good story. Lit should make it a rule that the whole story has to be written before any of it is published. I was enjoying this story

Sadly, the author needs to go back to middle school and learn the difference between your and you're as well as waste and waist.

Author you sure paint Bro as a WIMP!

why have you not finished this story? Leaving us with a cliffhanger like this is cruel to your readers. I was enjoying this story immensely.

You have to continue this story. Want to know what happens to his dad and between him and his sister.

Dad gets new heart him & shady get together teaching same school. Live together at family home

damn dude you left us all hanging