All Comments on 'Turnabout'

Gary = a piece of shit

Donna = a bigger piece of shit

I liked the story. Enough twists to make me dizzy.

As the previous comment states, none of these characters are very admirable people, but the story and turnabout is pretty entertaining.

Gary started it and Donna certainly finished it. If I was Dave I certainly would be watching my back however. Donna is one conniving little whore.

Thanks as always for your efforts.

Charleybear

is finding two JPB stories.

No real winner here but justice was served! (It was, wasn't it?"

Regards, DJ

this will do it ... very twisted and evil...

I like it in a perverse way

Man, I would hate to live in your world.

Do any of the characters really have to be likeable? The plot, the double plot, and the tripple plot is what makes this a good read.

JPB has a twisted sense of humor and I kinda like it.

In fact, this fantasy of inward-turning betrayals was nicely written and fun to read. Fun because you can't summon up any empathy for anyone by the time the screwing-over is done - ALL these people are annoying, conniving cheaters. Some of them were just too proud of their accomplishments to see the obvious - just maybe the other person knows something.

I assumed from the beginning that the one girlfriend might be a bad'un - and that the lack of direct evidence against the husband made things not be quite what they seemed. We could argue about whether or not such a callous bastard could possibly fool any woman into having faith in him, but that's a minor point. This is an intellectual puzzle fantasy. Think Agatha Christie, John Le Carre, or some other whodunit-style author. Well done.

Trademark JPB, gangbang and all. I did enjoy the multiple plot twists.

Was turning out great till she turned out to be cheating too. That ruined a good story in my book 8 (

However, I didn't like it.

Spy vs Spy stuff (with apologies to Mad Magazine).

But I'm thinking that when Gary gets out of jail (and it's a BIG if he goes to jail in the first place) he comes looking for her. And I see him burying her in a shallow grave when he finds her. I wonder if she ever considered THAT consequence. At the very least he gets out on bail before the trail. She might not make it to the Courtroom.

Thanks for sharing.

So many twists. We have a cheating wife, followed by the best friend cheating with the husband. Drugs, turncoats, police and a gangbang. For just a simple flash story it was unbelievably well crafted and written. Nice job.

The only problem was that all of the characters are worthless asshole cheating human being who should all suffer in extreme pain. Other than that it was a great read.

HA

GARY supposedly planted this shit but suddenly DEBBIE also planted that shit?

Um..no

Nice try.

You spoiled the story at the end with her wanting a gang bang, till then she had the moral high ground. Shows no class, just another trail trash story.

And it won't get you much time. If she makes the video and sends it to Gary, he's going to get an attorney and sue her for her setup. And Mark's going to testify against her to stay out of jail. The attorney will show that it was Donna that planned the whole thing and Mark was involved up to his eyeballs. I'm sure the other guys will testify against her too. So she's going to be doing jail time and she'll lose the house and all the assets when Gary gets his revenge. Stupid plan. Of course there are some men out there and women too (I'm thinking Debbie may be a tad upset) that might take a more direct line of action. Donna may just end up dead. Ya never know. And of course you never know in a JPB story because the end is always in the readers imagination!

Only a two star effort. Not a single likable character.

Very clever JPB,

Really enjoyed the twists.

Funny in a dark sense.

What some of the commenters apparently missed is that the very first cheating was done by Gary with Debbie. Donna's misdeeds were all a reaction. In plain terms: Gary started it, Donna finished it.

To those concerned about his mental state, read Open Letter From Just Plain Bob in Literotica forums for eye-opener.

Paul in Oklahoma

Wow! All that in ONE page.

In my previous comment, i mentioned Open Letter From Just Plain Bob that is on Literotica Discussion Board. The extra same material is easier to access as For Those Who Wondered on his Submissions page.

I keep sifting through Just Plain Bob's stories to find the occasional gem. This was one. Even the duds (often because unfinished) are written well in an interesting manner.

Paul in Oklahoma

That was a nice little piece of nasty, double crossing, shit, wasn't it? Low brow even for Bob.

...than the story was laughing my way through the comments that so articulately analyzed the twisted, double-crossing, nasty shenanigans.

In my previous comment (01/02/19),

"extra same material"

should read "exact same material."

Nasty story about nasty people doing nasty things.

Yucch.

Well written. Love the double cross.

A story about a group of people that were nothing, they deserved each other. LP