by Otazel
This story is the type of thing I saw more of here. A first time story told in good prose and style. It includes so much about the feel of things and dirty talk. Yummy! Write some more soon.
As a writer of erotica myself I thought that this story was stunning. Normally I would 'change' several aspects of a story that I read, but in case not one word can be changed - absolutely fantastic (and very sexy!)
Yes the 'reality' of the situation - based in the UK and all the dirty talk. Now combine that with some pissing or group sex and one hell of a story. Overall exxxcellent
I Like So Much Using The Back Door For Great Fun !Feye@myway.com
I really enjoyed this story...it was VERY hot. However, may I suggest that you go easy on the exclamation points? They were very overused and totally detracted from the times when things really were exciting!
Pacing, steamy detail, back-and-forth play of control between them, even the just-right amount of roughness - it all comes together. Great one!
and hot coupling! Loved it...they both got what they wanted, and vivid word painting of them getting it!
My second reading, after quite a while...would change to 4 stars to 5 if I could.
Never found a lady who would allow anal, thank you for enforcing my fantasy! A very well thought out and written story. I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.