by firstkiss
maybe I'd have those rewrites done. July huh? This is good, lots of heat, lots of chemistry and we still don't know his name...
...are we really THAT weird?
And what a smug, arrogant but undeniably sexy bloke you have in this tale!
MORE.
Please.
Thanks for the welcome break in my revision. Zera x
I'm with DK on this one. Imogen is so distracted and confused and we don't even know his name, nice touch! Looking forward to the next one.
cannot wait for the next chapter. Absolutely wonderful writing!!!!!
Ok, this is insane. You are now writing 3 different kick ass stories that are all great and all wip's. It is totally killing me. I love your work, I just selfishly wish I had found it after it was done! Keep it up (please!)
Love the story so far, looking forward to more! :)
All of the stories are so different, and SO GOOD! I check every day to see what treat you've posted...love it!
on the continent until I find the girl writing these stories! Then I'll make an ass of myself, I guess.
A different type of subject material. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Oh my gosh, who is this mysterious hot stranger?! And I'm so glad all of your men have dark hair! I thought it was gonna be that blond guy. No offense blondes but I love dark hair.
This really caught me. The writer did a fine job of filling in the characters and setting the scene.
I'll be waiting anxiously for the rest of Imogen's story.
This is great beginning; I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter! Can't wait to learn more about the dark-haired mystery man. Love it!!!
All your stories are wonderful, thank you!
To work on your characterization a bit. Your protagonist and the love interest in particular. Give me a little bit more to go on than just dialogue--give me some telling actions. In addition, the sexual chemistry seems a little forced. How to fix it? I'm not sure. But you're a good writer--you'll think of something
100% from each person that commented on your story, need I say more! It's great to be able to read a story in Literotica where the writer can actually write, and the reader is spell bound. Keep up the excellent work.
P.S. when is your first book being published?
Congratulations! You write very well. I do hope your heroine loses her ability to attract ill-mannered arrogant males who seem to have no respect for her privacy. Maybe she should give up the coffee shop and write at home.
60 year old George
Lots of people here, including me, think they can write. You, however, really can write! Outstanding!
I can tell you have a lot of story to tell and I'm looking forward to the following chapters.
I just wanted to let you know this is a solid start, you have a good narrative style and I really love the grammar references. (Yep, that's one *my* peeves/fetishes!)
Good luck! Keep it up!
Another great story of yours. Can't wait to read the other chapters.
No normal guy would freak out about an erotic story like that Douglas guy did.
I loved your story. Thank you for paying attention to the details, and to the spelling and grammar. It's so nice to read a story where the writer actually cares how it sounds. Great imagery, very real characters.<BR><BR>Thank you!
Bet Douglas went home to rub one out after reading that scene. Whatta dorkus. Stranger dude sounds de-llish (with 2 l's).
I'll likely not comment on the rest of the series, but I read it through about a year and a half ago, forgot to mark it down, and have searched diligently for it since. Glad I found it!
Ah the neuroses of writers! The Dr reading Imogen's work was especially funny; the extract together with his reaction made me laugh out loud, brilliant.
Thank you for sharing, and yes you inspired my use of the semicolon above. : )
I absolutely adore your work. Every single freaking story. I have been devouring them for days now and I can't even finish my lab report now because your stories are so bloody addictive.
I just thought you should know- because every writer likes a compliment and all :)
Well, /that/ was a fun beginning! Can't wait to read the rest.
Thanks!
VisualPerv