by Spector_Dugan
And when she begins to show, and when people press her for the identity of the child's father, what then? Make up a name? What will happen with the baby after it's born? A ten second orgasm--hell make it a good two-minutes--is worth the lifetime of problems that result?
You read fictional erotic stories but don't understand the impregnation thing, Something? I think there may be a lot more in life that you're missing, as well.
A thoroughly enjoyable story, Spector_Dugan. It certainly worked for me.
There is something about both parties trying to lay perfectly still while one is buried balls deep in the other and trying not to cum. I must admit, though, I had never thought about the sleeping bag.
suggest a sequel, with him fucking her ass and her doing ass to mouth
'Tis a really good read with a smoldering sexuality that deserves a Ch. 02...hopefully! Also, looking forward to your new series!
She let it go too far, her peers were not really her friends at all and let it ruin her and her brother's lives, just for their peer's amusement.she should have left with her brother and went home before it got to the point it did. And was she really that stupid, going to a party knowing she was looking to get laid by a boy she wanted to fuck and not be on the pill?Plus she was too dumb to realize they were set up by the host who was a spoiled rich kid who really didn't give a shit about them.I know this was a made up story, but, it is really close to what could happen in real life.I know some people like that who would use other people like that.I gave it 4 stars
Thanks a lot for the story! Perfect as always :) Looking forward to the next chapter and further development of their relationship!
Perfect wording and grammar. I wish I had your imagination, and will look forward to more stories from you.
i take it tyler is madisons brother. hailey and tom should be allowed by the writer to embarrass them much the same way. hope to see another chapter to this one.
Great story!! Would love a sequel but don't go outrageous like some of the readers are suggesting. Keep it the way you wrote this one. Very intriguing.
I'll admit, big sister/little brother stories are my absolute favorite, and I loved this one. I don't know if this was intentional, but I got the impression that Tommy has been in love with his big sister for a while now, and it made me very interested in seeing a sequel. It would be nice to see how their relationship develops from here, as well as to see how Hailey and her brother are in bed when they're not being forced together like they were at the party.
Bravo! Bravo! Fantastic story! Plot, characters, drama, and obviously spell checked.
Very well done!
Please make a sequel. I'd love to see their relationship continue as well as the sex of course. XP Especially when she starts to show.
Great story. I think you left us HANGING. We need another chapter because way too much was left in the air.
What happened with Tom? Did they go home together? What about her panties and bra? You left him without any idea where he went. Where are his boxers? Where did he leave his pants.
Did Madison take Tom into her bedroom and fuck him or did she find Tyler.
I thought the brother/sister was a little much, but it was awesome sex.
Hard to believe a sexually active Sophomore in college was PLANNING TO FUCK TYLER and had no plans for birth control. She was a slut and not taking birth control pills or even an IUD. Did she have any condoms to use on Tyler?
I am glad she plans to fuck him again. She needs a Morning After pill to be safe.
What will her Mom say when she shows up like a "WANTON WOMAN"?
What's wrong with people that they like this crap?
Initially put off by the stupid use of "come", where it should have been "go", ("Your brother has to go"), I persevered as long as I could, but gave up halfway down the second page.
This is NOT good writing.
At the start I wasn't sure I'd finish this one but I'm glad I did. The sleeping bag part was VERY erotic to me and made the story.
I don't understand the commenters who were disgusted by incest when the story was clearly tagged. If you are shocked by incest stories here's a suggestion - don't read incest stories.
And another thing - about Hailey not being on the pill, lots of people use condoms for birth control as well as preventing STD's. Why do some commenters assume she didn't have any with her? Why wouldn't a GUY bring some condoms to a party if he was looking to get laid? The reason her brother didn't use one is that he WASN'T looking to get laid AND he was tricked into fucking his sister.
I think you made it clear that Tom and Hailey really did love each other and showed it by how well they tried to hold back for so long in the sleeping bag before finally giving in to their bodies' wants and needs in the end. This holding back was the most important part of the story and what made it so believable and sexy.
Also, just because she assumed she was impregnated doesn't mean she WAS. I would think that the next time she fucked her brother they would use protection.
I also object to some commenters saying she was a slut. I hate that word and this girl certainly wasn't one from what I learned of her in the story. Women and girls generally enjoy sex just as much as men. A man is only a good lover if he can make his partner climax too. I think some of the commenters here haven't got a clue.
Lastly, I have vented enough - I think you did a better job with this story than your readers realize. Thank you!
This is one of the best stories I have read. So well written.
Just to see how they interact with each other when they're not surrounded with a crowd of horny and inebriated college kids.
Love it. Here's hoping for a continuation or more stories just like it. 5/5
great read one of the best i have read please follow up thaks
It was sex and fucking yet all I felt was pain. Tom and Hailey are well and good but the way Madison and Tyler played with her, I just don't think they should be so happy or that our protagonists should be okay with them. That was a betrayal if I ever saw one. Tyler and Madison leading Hailey and Tom respectively on, only to slap them in the face saying they are more interested in each other than the respective siblings.
I probably am going too deep, deeper than even remotely necessary on this site I guess... Either way, good job. Hope to see a sequel and maybe a retribution(?) soon.
J. Jamie Dupane
Yeah, I want to echo the outrage felt by the first commenter Jamie. I hope that Hailey emerges from this royally pissed at Madison, feeling the need for an apology from Tyler for helping Madison set that up, and feeling more appreciation for her brother.
Another thing, c'mon, havent' we heard of morning after?
And the "nuh uh" usage. I haven't heard anyone older than 14 say this.
It ruined the story. What a piss poor plot device. The day after pill would solve the incest equation and would be less of a rod ruiner than that crap. It ruined a good story until you cheapened it.
Agreed on the whole impregnating aspect. morning after pill, abortion, etc, that ending wasn't at all satisfying. maybe if Tyler and Madison were brother and sister as well, it would be more of a twist and her protests would be "but Tyler is your..." then you turn the story into a double incest story rather than just a tricked into incest story. Easily done by adding a convo in the pool where Hailey expresses her shock and how playful Madison is with her(Madison's) older brother. Madison can reply with some sort of don't knock it until you've tried it, with not much effort you can be alluding to the net series of events. Then it's showing the opposite brother sister relationship as well as the older sister younger brother relationship keep the switchoroo and the surprise at it but change Madison's response to be something like let me show you how it is done, or here is your chance with who you've really been eyeing all night... I feel like that would make for a better story.
Highly erotic, really looking forward to a sequel. Let Hailey keep the baby.
30 years ago a bunch of us were together daring each other to do things and the drunker we got the dirtier the dares got. my buddy got a dare to sit on a chair with his sister on his lap with his cock inside her for 5 minutes. all of us were naked by that point and he only lasted 2 minutes before he filled her with his cum. back then there was no morning after pill and she ended up having abortion. their parents sold the house and moved cause everyone knew what happen. I'm still friends with my buddy and a few years back he told me that him and his sister still fuck each when they get a chance.
I thought the story was real damn good. I agree that the impregnation thing didn't really do it for me, but hell, even if that one aspect of the story isn't exactly my jam to ram to, the piece as a whole (plot, writing, syntax) was better than the vast majority of stuff I've read on this site. Creative, well put together, and very hot. Don't really think it's worth declaring ruined just 'cause of one bit at the end.
Though yeah if there's a sequel I really hope she uses a morning-after pill lololololol
And the impregnation plot point just turned it up to 11. But what really clinched it, what really made it spectacular, was the way that Hailey suddenly realized how good of a brother/protector Tom had been, and decided that he was a man worthy of her, worthy to be permitted to impregnate her. That was beautiful. Now, if Madison gets a good smack in the face, this will be in the top five stories on Literotica, in my opinion. Well, that and Hailey and Tom becoming a real, genuine couple. Awesome work, keep it up! :-)
That was truly fucking awesome :). ...of course the story BEGS a second chapter so we can get a serious brother fucking sister hormone throwdown! Followed up wit a nice, slow lovemaking, cuddling, spooning, fall asleep all night and wake up and do it again ending! ;)
I thought the preg angle, in this situation, was hot as hell. Loved sis finally figuring out her brother too. Hey, if she doesn't want to keep his baby and secretly elope with him off to some new town and play mr and mrs, then she can stop at the pharmacy on the way home and get plan B, heh.
Hell, you know they both came twice as hard as the would have as soon as she told him he WOULD get her pregnant and to do it! Lol. I think its just a damned shame there wasnt enough room for him to stroke her ass, can you imagine how she would have exploded then? Hehe, Im imagining it right now ;)
Thanks for the great read, keep 'em coming!
...and please, chapter two!!
I've read aloft stories on here but that was hot as fuck seriously well done and please continue this story I wait with fingers at the ready ;)
Really great story that needs a follow up chapter. Hailey seems to have developed deeper feelings for Tom, deeper than familial love but she still has to realise it. Tom is obviously in love with Hailey from the way he was focusing on her at the party.
We need to know how their relationship progresses. Is Hailey pregnant? Will she and Tom become lovers?
Seriously that was incredibly hot please do a follow up or even a mini series
I really loved it. Please make another part where she is pregnant and they still are together. Maybe in a new home together? Thanks a lot for the story!
So good. ❤️❤️❤️ I’ve got this bookmarked for things I love to read. Follow up chapter maybe????
They both got what they really wanted! I wouldn't mind seeing another chapter.
Very creative, I liked what you did with the story. I guess the only thing that bothered me was, why the hell would a rich girl like Madison work at a Chilli's? And how would you see a wet spot from pool soaked panties? Little things like that throw me off, otherwise 5 stars.
You've been watching too much porn. No man can cum gallons. There was a study done by the National Institutes Of Health that culminated less than a decade ago. The study lasted for 10 years. The average ejaculate from all races of males, was less than a tablespoon.
In addition, black males ejaculated smaller amounts of cum and the sperm count was much lower than white men.
Don't believe me? Look it up and you can read all the results.
https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3812375/
this was really hot made me so wet I had to play and I had an orgasm at almost the same time she did at the end I had to stop reading it was so intense so please write a follow up u have talent :P
Seriously?? Have you never heard of a hyperbole? It's a figure of freaking speech. I doubt the author LITERALLY meant a gallon
Hate the pregnant part. Hasn't she heard of the morning after pill? Then birth control pills, and she can let him fill her up all the time.
This story was fantastic! Plausible set up, great execution.....and loved, loved, loved the ending. Was that ever fun!
Please consider adding another chapter. I'd love to find out what happens to Hailey and Tom next. Please tell us!
I loved this story so much I made my dad re-enact it with me at a party we went to last week with my uni friends. (Fortunately most of them thought he was just this hot older guy I'd hooked up with!). For those wanting a sequel or a different ending: use your imagination - the story can go however you want. If you don't like incest, I suggest avoiding incest stories. And if you don't like pregnancy risk, give Spector_Dugan a miss too. As for me, I don't THINK I'm pregnant yet...
A sequel would be nice, but isn't necessary. We did like it, but Madison needs to be put in her place, she did things that are not ok.
Hope Tom and Hailey have a beautiful life together.
Would read a whole series of this if you wrote it,
Tanhors and family.
Really...incest in front of 100 students and you expect it not to be on everybody’s phone and becoming the butt of all jokes and laughs??? What kind of stupid plot was that? No eroticism, no heat...1 star for putting words on paper...
While you tried to build the suspense up we all knew what was going to happen,so really no suspense at all.
Throwing pregnancy in ruins it for me, a SCARE is okay but not actually getting knocked up.
I do agree that Madison's actions require a comeuppance. After the crowd is gone make her eat Hailey out to get all Tom's seed, while Tom gets his way with her.
But Tyler needs a little payback too, so he can clean up Maddie after Tom's done using her.
I know I loved it the first time I read it, still love the heck out of it! I, for one, would LOVE a followup chapter with just something as simple as brother carrying her upstairs to a spare room. She calls mom, 'hey mom, the party's over and everyone is about kicked out. She asked if brother and I wouldn't mind staying the night and helping clean the place up after we have breakfast, so we're gonna stay off the road and be responsible adults in the morning, if thats ok with you, hehe!'
(Brother going down on her slowly while she tries to get off the phone) Then, an awesome, epic, mindblowing slow, fast, slow little brother's huge cock stuffing little sister to the brim and rocking both their universes :). Woooo!!
Please please please???
I loved this story. It was very different from all the other stories on here and I truly enjoyed not knowing what was going to happen. Most stories you can predict how it’s gonna turn out. With this story, it was unique and I kept wondering what was going to happen, I was drawn in the whole time. Loved this story. One of the best ones I’ve read! I hope you have a chapter 2 or at least continue this story very soon if not. It needs to be continued, at least to a finish.... What happened next, how did they react after, the next time they seen eachother, did she get pregnant, how does their relationship turn out? Thanks again for that amazing, well thought up story. Your an amazing and talented writer!!
This was absolutely great! By far my favorite story so far, I love the characters and the story. It’s such a unique set up and I truly want to see where this goes. Great job!
That was a crazy ride and I enjoyed it. I will say though that she could have said no. Great story.
Simply put, you have to give your readers an ending. We deserve to know what happens next to Tom and Hailey, where does it go from here? The story must go on.
and revenge on Hailey. Have brother get her pregnant. add her to the Household. or she can get the Marvelous Tyler to Marry her carrying Toms kid.
Starting off this was interesting but after the third page it started gettting a little drawn out after Tom and Haley end up in the sleeping bag,it took forever to get thru the 16 minutes.But then after Haley told her brother to cum in her even tho she wasn't on birth control it implied Haley was nothing more than a slut which I totally disagree with.
But what I really think that was kinda disappointing was the lack of a proper ending,I think Tom and Haley should have fast forwarded to after the baby was born and ended up falling in love and moved in together and raised their baby and had one or two more and been one happy family.I think Tyler and Madison just played a cruel joke on Tom and Haley.
I hope you continue the series Will they make her pregnant ?
Can’t wait for the next chapter.
After Hailey objects "But he's my..." , Madison could put it up to a vote of the crowd: "Should we put her with Tyler, and her brother with me? Or should we put Tyler with me, and put sister and brother together?" And the crowd would cheer as it voted for the more taboo option.
Was Tyler fucking Madison in the sleeping bag? If so, could show more wriggling as his dick emerges from shorts and he maneuvers around her panties. Or if not, why not? I never thought that Tyler might be Madison's brother!
The key moment where her brother's cock slips into her is kind of skipped over. Maybe he slips in halfway, then she keeps wriggling (tickled by his hands on her breasts) so it slips in farther.
The cock-on-buttocks could be foreshadowed: for some reason Tom is standing behind Hailey in the crowd, maybe waiting in line to get into the house (or for the bathroom), and they get mooshed together.
Nice story, but why get her preggers? You lost one star there...
the story is great, would really like to see more between these two.
Don’t think she should end up pregnant but I would love to read more of this story if you have time to write it!
To answer a question below about why the author chose to have the sister get pregnant: I'm pretty sure that was the whole point of the story. It seemed there was more under the surface that wasn't written about.
Would love an epilogue to this story. Great work.
By reading all the comments, By popular demand you owe us a sequel. Oh yeah, good story by the way. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
And maybe a chapter 3, who knows, just run with it. Thanks for your great writing.
I just finished reading your other story about Micheal and Tabby etc and I commented there on how it needs a sequel or even a series... this is another awesome story that demands a sequel. Please don’t just leave it without one. I want to see them have a child together, fall in love, come out to their parents about their grandchild, maybe even get married... more please 5 stars ofc
Absolutely amazing story please make part 2 and then 3 and co time this story so many different ways this story can go amazing work
We're all dying to see this story continued. Please, PLEASE give us as many more parts to this story as you can. Even though I already cummed reading this my cock is still hard and my balls are aching to read the continued adventures of Hailey and Tom!
...even the unthinkable pregnancy angle is one of those taboos you either get or don't get but FFS why involve a room full of near-strangers as witnesses to make it lose all credibility?
Not a bad storyline but for me this story is far from finished. I have to agree with the other readers you need to continue on. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Beautiful beginning of an outstanding brother/sister love story. Unfortunately, it's like I set the book down and went to the bathroom and the dog ate the rest of the book.
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You're a twisted and talented person. And vice versa, too. I really love how your stories are a little bit tragic horror - in that your protagonists proceed logically and inevitably towards their downfall - but are, ultimately, comedy - in that the everyone ends up with the right person, fuck the world, and happily ever, etc. Twisted and talented. Nice.