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Click here"Paul, we need a swimming pool an indoor swimming pool," Celine demanded. "Oh, and another wall of lockers; I sold all the lockers already."
"Paul, we're going to need more parking; we got two hundred and fifty two members and there's hardly enough room for us to park," Cindy demanded. "There's no room for our members to park."
"Paul, I think the ceiling in the dance studio needs to be twelve fee, not ten," Trish demanded.
"Paul, is it hard to run a gas line in; one of the women wants to learn how to cook on a gas stove; that's what her mother in law has; she's living with her mother in law and..." Pam demanded.
"That better be a boy," Paul said as he patted his wife's belly. "Hear me? That better be a boy."
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Orville Jackson slammed on the brakes as a rock struck his windshield. Another one bounced off and he looked over to the left.
Bill Baggett actually smiled as Orville Jackson read him his rights.
"Fine, fine, take me to jail," he cheerfully said.
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Elizabeth looked at the caller ID box before answering the phone.
"Hey, Robert," she said in greeting.
"Yeah, working as a dancer here in Atlanta, at Daddy's on Grant Street; it's right around the corner from the airport," Robert said.
"She have any idea you a detective?" Elizabeth asked. "She gave me the slip once before; I don't want..."
"Nah, she thinks I'm this harmless little retard," Robert laughed. "Hell, she even gave me a free lap dance 'cause I'm sweet."
"Then that better not be on your expense sheet," Elizabeth laughed.
"Nah, it ain't. She works Mondays, Tuesdays, Fridays and Saturdays there. On Saturday morning she goes to the park and sits and watches all the kids playing. She is one sad girl; I mean she ain't never smiling," Robert said.
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"No, Dad," Bill said into the telephone. "No, don't get me Marie Robichaux; she's too good. I just wanted to call; let you know where I am, let you know I'm going to be all right. No, no, don't get me a lawyer. Dad, I want to go to jail; it's probably my only hope."
Dick Davis smiled sadly as he led Bill to the back and locked him into a cell by himself.
"It'll be all right," Bill smiled to him.
"Yeah, son, it'll be all right," Dick agreed.
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Daphne smiled; Big Eddie's snoring was at monstrous proportion tonight. But it was so good to see him able to sleep. He would never admit it to his kids, but worrying about them kept him up at nights.
"Big Eddie, you are one Hell of a man," she thought to herself and snuggled up against him.
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The air was just beginning to turn cooler; the leaves were beginning to change color. It was a beautiful day as she looked around the park.
The merry go round was her favorite. The children squealed and shrieked, especially if a bigger kid would stand there and spin the contraption really fast for them.
TeddiAnn would be four years old in just a few weeks.
She tried to push the thought out of her head, but it crept back in. Her daughter would be four years old.
She felt someone sit down next to her, but did not look over. She was used to men sitting next to her, trying to pick her up. Usually she ignored them until they got the message and walked away.
"Looks like they're having fun," Elizabeth commented.
Missy felt like she'd been punched. The world swam in front of her eyes and she couldn't breathe.
She could not react when she felt Elizabeth take her hand into her own.
"I miss you; I've been looking for you for almost four years now," Elizabeth confessed. "Missy, come home. I need you."
The End of TBS 10
- COMMENTS
Xacksonover 2 years agoAbandon all hope all yee who progress beyond this point.
Seriously. He starts killing of people we’re invested in and then NOT killing off someone with a new character who very much Would have killed the judge who got a main character killed, and subsequently Cathy and Rays story also. Seriously, DO NOT read beyond this point. I knew I should have stopped at the end of chapter 11 but barely one the second page after what happened to Cathy and Ray, Literally out of nowhere, I just can’t justify finishing the series. If you’re going to have ray and Cathy piss off the gangbangers, show it. Don’t just have them rock up out of nowhere and literally mince the entire family. Fuckit, I do not care if I’m spiking the shittiest chapter, you do not explode ray, cave Cathy’s chest in, and then have the gang bangers proceed to shoot the children in the head with shitty story telling. Yes I said it, I literally came back to this chapter to warn EVERYONE that you’re going to start killing off people we actually cared about to a degree. Fucking slap in the face of all that is holy and unholy in story telling. Seriously the one who killed candy very much would have shot the judge. Thus ending his letting thr gangbangers go free for them to kill Elaine, and then subsequently Cathy and Ray.
Anonymousover 3 years agoI read the comment (just before me) by TestSubject001, recalled there was some kind of warning in the comments on chapter one, next looked at comments on chapters 11 and 12, after which I sampled some of the concluding paragraphs of chapter 12. All that, combined with my aversion to dark stories and preference for happy endings, and I decided that I would just keep my imagination of how things went happily forward , and skip chapters 11 and 12.
The author has an ability that few can match to spin an intriguing tale that keeps me figuratively on the edge of my seat anticipating the next developments/chapters.
I greatly appreciate the expertise of JimBob44's excellent storytelling; however, sometimes his choice of subject matter (eg. Transgender & Crossdessing, Anal, and Gay Male) steers me away from certain of his stories. Or, when those themes come up unexpectedly while reading, lessens my enjoyment of those particular stories.
Paul in Oklahoma
TestSubject001over 11 years agoThis is how i will remember the story as the ending. After one 12 hour sitting of reading the whole series (including next 2 chapters), i just can't bring myself to accept the last two chapters as the end of the story. In the time line, they may come across some problems, but ultimately it's not who dies and who lives and what have you. It is just how horrible convoluted the story got at the end that did me in.
It started out a very loving and heart felt story. Then i just don't know what it became in chapter 11. The lack of sex in the previous chapter were just fine by me. I don't read these types of stories for that. I really read them for the romantic side of them. The sex is just a bonus.
It felt like in the end the author was going for bang out end. And that goal was not accomplished. It seemed rushed and over the top.
I encourage anyone that really got into it, to really consider skipping the last two chapters. I wish i had.
Sidney43almost 12 years agoI got started on this author a few days back when the latest story was posted about broken flowers, so started reading other submissions. Haven't read every one of them because of subject matter, but given the sensitivity (mostly) I see, probably will read them all at some point.
This was a long read and I loved every minute of it. A part of the tapestry of life in a small Louisiana town where there are good people and some not so good. Happy times and tragedy, just like real life and the author has a great sense of how to develop characters and also has a fine sense of humor.
I agree that there needs to be another chapter at least. Does Elizabeth get together with Gordon, or has her baby with Missy as a companion. I would think the former once she finds out why he was so unbelieving, which would be expected.
